IMMORTALS

IMMORTALS

A Poem by Betty Hermelee
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Haiku, nature

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Orange sun descends
as red super moon prevails
darkness lures spirits
Ghostly night creatures
stir in the the thick dark forest
a high screech echoes
Dawn draws a day star
as chilled night immortals sleep
roosters crow, birds sing

© 2020 Betty Hermelee


Author's Note

Betty Hermelee
stanzas should be separated

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I love how each poem is a complete stand-alone & yet they all go together well, too. #1 -- love the juxtaposition of orange sun & red moon -- nicely imaginative! #2 -- love taking a spooky turn in the middle of an otherwise celebratory poem. #3 -- love the juxtaposition of dawn star & chilled night, which parallels the comparison in #1, like bookends showing life's curve balls (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

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Betty, immortal is nature, though individual lives come and go. Though three separate poems that stand well alone, I think it works well as one, too. Splendid imagery and good flow.

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You sent chills up my spine!

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love how each poem is a complete stand-alone & yet they all go together well, too. #1 -- love the juxtaposition of orange sun & red moon -- nicely imaginative! #2 -- love taking a spooky turn in the middle of an otherwise celebratory poem. #3 -- love the juxtaposition of dawn star & chilled night, which parallels the comparison in #1, like bookends showing life's curve balls (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Month Ago


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the combination works so well..three haiku that work alone but also as one when put together...
Mortals have to sleep...those immortal only come out at night.
lovely grouping.
j.

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Added on February 13, 2020
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Betty Hermelee
Betty Hermelee

Black Mountain, NC



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I am an emerging poet; I have written over 250 poems, mostly about slices of life, happy or sad, sometimes tragic. I try to use vivid images in my poetry. I also write about my extensive travel expe.. more..

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