A MIRROR FREAKS ME

funky poem, heat, hair frizz, desperation

Torrid heat whacks me

smelly sweat leaks down my chin

windows open max

stagnant air makes my hair frizz

my world for a fan

to dry my sticky body

a mirror freaks me

I throw it out the window

OMG! Nothing!

I retrieve colored ice cubes

trash them on my head

cool frost droplets sooth my limbs

I am motionless

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is the kind of wild unexpected writing I crave. This is as far as possible from anything sounding trite or predictable. I love how the self-deprecating description borders on truly grotesque becuz I also love to use exaggeration as humor & love seeing it well done like this. Where I live, A/C is not common even tho we have 110* temps for a month at a time in summer . . . gets up to 95*-ish inside . . . but we don't have humidity & we get an ocean breeze starting about 4 or 5 pm, so it doesn't look & smell & feel as bad as in your poem! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Betty Hermelee]

Yes, thanks Margie, it was meant to be humorous, just got in the mood; thanks for appreciating it! And always for making great comments! Fondly and hugs , Betty

[poetgurl]

I found this write cute, I chuckled here and there. Very well written, much enjoyed. I prefer it warm than cold any day. Awesome writing

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you; it was supposed to be a bit sarcastic!

[Chris Shaw]

We don't have air conditioning either Betty and my hair also frizzes in the heat, particularly when it is humid. Sounds like it's mighty hot where you are and fans are in short supply to cool the air down. Coloured ice cubes should lower the temperature.

Chris

[R.E. Ray]

Betty, this reads more like my home in southeast GA. I don't think much about mirrors in the heat. But, I don't have the same hair frizz problems.

You've certainly captured an almost manic like episode here. The heat can do that to us. It's as if the brain is an overheated radiator. Maybe get a garden hose. You might need the colored ice cubes for a drink later. Cool write! :)

[Lea Sheryn]

I think we have all been in this place when we are hot and sticky.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

This is how I feel in our heatwaves down under here great poem
They predict an unusual 36 hot day today
10 above average for this season

[Betty Hermelee]

It gets pretty hot even in NC!!! But we love the mountains!

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Is that New Caledonia

[Betty Hermelee]

No, it’s North Carolina, USA!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i never like how i look in the mirror...I also know that people often look into the mirror and don't like what they see because they are really looking inside themselves.
I think Plath wrote her "MIrror" poem with that in mind...she used the metaphor of an old woman looking in as she grew older, but i think it was more of her looking inside herself.
This is like a psychedelic version of Plath's piece.
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks for your review Jacob; did you like the poem, even though it was a bit weird???

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh my yes, love psychedelic...i am from the sixties...:))))

[Betty Hermelee]

Whew!!! That is great!!! Thank you! Betty

[The Unknown Sith]

I like this. Niiice work.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you, I appreciate you comment

[NotUsinganymore]

Very funny poem. I've been told I'm attractive but when I look in the mirror I think otherwise lol.

I try to avoid looking in the mirror, reminds me of my brother's appearance.

[Betty Hermelee]

Yes, it's supposed to be funny. Thank you for reviewing ut.

[NotUsinganymore]

You're welcome