TWIN LAKES

TWIN LAKES

A Poem by Betty Hermelee
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Nature, color, growth

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I often ramble my favorite foot path
in June, when green is my color of choice
trees with canopies of shade
shadows dance in front of me
a slight haze peeks out early
until the sun cooks it hot
twin lakes flicker
reflections as an oversize mirror
I stare at them, lopsided in the water
clear mountain streams supply, nourish
yield life below the surface
geese live here now and then
honk honk noises travel distant
they speak to each other
follow as family, tiny ripples behind

One morning on my routine walk
I took note of a broad, cold tree
but it was not this that caught my look
rather, a profuse growth of off-white mushrooms
trapped in the bark, an unusual pattern
of abstract gems
nearly like a bunch of flower petals
I stood, awed by this design spectacle
an alive entity grows on a dead trunk
perhaps recent rains stimulates its surge
their comeliness, undoubtedly worthy of a photo

© 2020 Betty Hermelee


Author's Note

Betty Hermelee
This part of NC is just stunning!!!

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I have seen quite a few of these splendid word pictures of nature recently. It may be a reaction to the extreme ugliness we see daily in the news. Whatever, keep them coming, for we need them now. I am familiar with the mountains of NC, and this one made me think of them.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Betty Hermelee

3 Years Ago

Thank you John, as always



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Beautiful. I love your poems describing the nature that surrounds you.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Lea Sheryn

3 Years Ago

It is for prose too
Betty Hermelee

3 Years Ago

Thanks Lea!
Lea Sheryn

3 Years Ago

You're welcome
This sounds more like the straightforward writing I remembered from you! After 30+ years of technical writing, I was severely straightforward when I first came to the cafe 5 years ago. I've stretched in new directions after reading how others are doing it differently, but straightforward will always be my "go to" -- as I suspect with you, as well. You sound like a cerebral thinker . . . even when you're conveying the sensory, there's a touch of the analytical. That's all overall stuff.

Now about this poem. V2 is leaps & bounds better than V1. It sounds like you are a little ho-hum in V1 & your details are sorta general & fuzzy & there's quite a bit of "ME" in there . . . I ramble, my favorite color, dance in front of me, I stare . . . just my opinion, but I think it's better to describe nature on nature's terms, not as an adjunct of however I happen to be observing it. About two-thirds of the way thru V1, you stop with the "ME" perspective & this is when it feels like you're finally immersed in the scene you're describing, like the "ME" has stepped away so we can see just the sensory details. Then in V2, you really get cranked up to a high level of sensory perception & sharing, which is awesome. I actually think this should be a poem about those damn mushrooms, not the boring rather nondescript lakes! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Years Ago


Betty Hermelee

3 Years Ago

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A good example of creative and stunning writing, congratulations, it is a beautiful text.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Betty Hermelee

3 Years Ago

Thank you for a lovely review!
Your imagery is captivating Betty. I really enjoyed where you took me. I have seen fungus growing on dead tree wood myself. It is quite amazing. Not just in shape, but colour too. Damp, warm conditions and it thrives. Well worth a poem and a photograph my friend.

Chris

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very enjoyable read
It actually mirrors much of what is happening around here
The mushrooms, so wet this year they are flourishing
The twin lakes remind me of horse riding days in Penticton
All very nicely done and a great feeling

Posted 3 Years Ago


Betty Hermelee

3 Years Ago

Thanks for reviewing Dave, Fondly, Betty
this reminds me of my little hikes i took when i visited my sister in Deep Gap, NC....
yes, there is such a peaceful, quiet beauty there...great for introspection....
j.
lovely imagery, as always, Betty.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Betty Hermelee

3 Years Ago

Thank you as always Jacob!
I have seen quite a few of these splendid word pictures of nature recently. It may be a reaction to the extreme ugliness we see daily in the news. Whatever, keep them coming, for we need them now. I am familiar with the mountains of NC, and this one made me think of them.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Betty Hermelee

3 Years Ago

Thank you John, as always

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Betty Hermelee
Betty Hermelee

Black Mountain, NC



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My love of poetry results from my love of art. As a painter I am able to express myself on a canvas. As a poet my words come from my heart, my moods, sometimes sad, mostly upbeat. I like to use vivid .. more..

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