SLEEP TALKER

a banter about sleep talk and what it means if anything!!

I, a sleep talker

as opposed to a sleep walker

I utter words often, quite clear

my hubby assures he can hear

secrets buried deep

prefer not to repeat a peep

he queries my words

rants and mumbles in his own way

recalls the name "Stu"

cries out is that number two?

I gulp!

No, only one!

he gasps am I done?

I retort it's only a fake

I sleep and talk not to forsake

you must trust this fact

my sleep walk is only an act!

Reviews

[Lorry]

I reckon this is similar to the "thought-crimr" of George Orwell's 1984, but wonder if it would have caused such a kerfuffle if not for the man's name being uttered.
At least you had an understanding partner (maybe). I have in the past been pouted at for laughing in my sleep and my dream not being about her, like I can control it.
But I would much rather laugh in a dream than cry 😀
Perhaps mutter in your sleep something along the lines of "Well, he can always be replaced"... Just to keep him on his toes 😀

[Betty Hermelee]

A thoughtful review, many thanks, Betty

[Poetic Beauty]

Yes I sleep talk as well. My now ex once asked me who Jesse was? I said I didn’t know but I knew exactly who jesse was and what the dream was about. But to save argument sake I pretended I didn’t know cause it was a dream.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks for reading! I’m glad I’m not the only one! 😊

[Poetic Beauty]

Nope not at all. I hum in my sleep sometimes if it’s a really good dream and wake myself up lol

[Richard🖌]

Ahhh, Lady Betty 😴

I've been caught more than once letting the proverbial cat out of the bag through my loosely sleeping lips, and to my own demise, I might add. And, it took some rather slippery oration to escape from such a suspect trap; I'm sure you can imagine me mumbling 'n stuttering, trying to put my tongue back in my mouth … LOL!
I really have enjoyed the whole creative premise of this rather awkward situation, uniquely and rarely spoken of in poetry. Many, I'll bet, will relate to it, too.
Techy stuff: Excellent Rhyming Couplets, Betty, one of my favorite forms. For a smoother read, I would skip the unneeded, repeated "I" in L3. In L7-8 the loss of rhymes stumbles quite suddenly, distracting an otherwise captive audience, and it may have simply been an oversight; I know I've done this more than once without even realizing it, until someone mentioned it in a review … LOL!
Hm? What about something like:
"he queries my words gone astray
rants and mumbles in his own way"
Then, in the final line, change "walk" into "talk", and it will make perfect sense.

Whatever, you know I simply adore your wonderfully creative skills with a "pen" … now, I'll read it "again", try to forget "when" I revealed sleepy, inopportune talk of my "sin". ; )
I knew I was going to love this one soon as I saw the title and purrrfect picture choice.
Thanks a zillion for a great share, Dear Lady-Poet … hugs! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[barleygirl]

This is fun lighthearted interplay between husband & wife with believable suspicions stated in a non-threatening way. The takeaway is that it's not serious stuff between these two, just a point to tease about. Maybe this narrator doesn't even talk in her sleep at all & the whole idea been fabricated & perpetuated by the hubby to keep her off-balance! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

It felt a little confusing when, at the beginning you say "not a sleep walker" but then at the end you describe sleep walk as only an act!??!

[Betty Hermelee]

It was a fun write, but i do sleep talk!! Thus, the idea!
thanks for reading Margie, xo,B

[Moh. Ghufron Cholid]

I like this, my sleep walk is only an act!. It is very good positive thinking

[Lale]

haha so much fun reading this one. Sleep talkers make funny murmurs.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Lale, much appreciated ,stay safe!

[Lale]

likewise :)

[Dave Brown]

Ha, you will have to get a gag before you spill the whole bag

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks Dave, hope you liked the humor ( haha)

[NotUsinganymore]

Very humourous poem about sleep talking. I sleep talk too

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you! Does your wife or partner get angry lose sleep???

[NotUsinganymore]

Ehh she's use to it at this point so she can sleep. Sometimes she leaves to sleep in the nursery.

[Chris Shaw]

Ha! Smiled at this one Betty. Maybe he is winding you up :)) You wouldn't know because you are asleep. Yes, I've often wondered what secrets could be given away like this. So the mystery man you don't know anything about is Stu? Well Betty, I hope he is tall, dark and handsome and is sweeping you off your feet in dreamland. As for your hubby, maybe if he thinks there's some competition on the horizon, he will pamper you :) "Such a fun poem.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks always Chris!