NIGHT ABSTRACTION

When the skies open

Summer storms thrash about

slants the rainfall

boom clouds, lightning bolts

abstraction in the night skies

When it passes

at the dim light of dawn

rainwater cuts deep

into the hillsides

rock and mud crash land

to their resting place

The sun, all dressed for the day

shrivels and dries the earth

tidies up the setting

bushes and flowers neatly planted

stand erect, rain drops atop

to enhance color

ahead of the next blast

Reviews

[Laconic Meraki]

I love this.

To me, it speaks volume and depth.

It's all about perception.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks for visiting Christa abs reviewing my poem,all the best
Betty

[Laconic Meraki]

Ditto miss B💜

[barleygirl]

Altho this is a dynamic depiction of a storm thrashing & then passing (especially love the way you show the sun bringing back some order) . . . this could be a figurative way of reinforcing the old axiom: "this too shall pass." It's true about so much in life -- things are transformed in the light of day, or after a night's sleep, or whatever! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Betty Hermelee]

I feel the sun protects us, in a way, especially after a storm; but it can also burn us...thus gathering clouds are welcome too. Thanks always for your excellent review. hugs, B

[emmajoy]

I love storms! Learned to love them on lake Como. Watching them was like being baptized a water nympth or summat!

Your third verse is wonderful, true as true, welcome as welcome: put so gently yet clearly. Not a negative aftermath but the kindness it is.

First and second stanzas really display the power of storms - Summer storm, complete with 'lightning bolts, abstraction in the night skies' and then: ' the dim light of dawn .. rainwater cuts deep into the hillsides .. ' You've painted with words., Betty. Love it!

[Betty Hermelee]

you have lent a perfect picture of this poem...I love how you analyzed it line by line....Thank so much Emma for stopping by to review, Best, Betty

[emmajoy]

In the process of reading your poem, i was taken back. You have a great voice for the word, Betty!!!

[Betty Hermelee]

I’m flattered!

[emmajoy]

is true,, can imagine you recording that, perhaps on vocaroo..

[Betty Hermelee]

some day!!

[Chris Shaw]

Wonderful imagery of stormy weather Betty and the sounds that come with it. Love the fireworks in the sky, but most of all when it stops, there is such a feeling of calm. Trickling water, raindrops sparkling in sunlight. That's when you see nature's jewels at their best. Storms at night akwats seem more scary. Lovely write my friend.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks Chris, we just had one of those belly-whoppers the other night! I prefer the calm before and after the crash! Thanks for stopping by and writing such a nice review! Best, Betty

[Chris Shaw]

You are very welcome Betty:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

even thought they can be scary, they are beautiful in their own way...
and the sun has a lot of responsibility...it needs to show its face and work on drying out
the land after torrential rains and floods have displaced.
Makes me wonder if the rocks and mud have flood insurance.
:)))
another poem that makes us hear the thunder...and touch the lightning.

[Betty Hermelee]

They certainly can be beautiful; but destructive too as seen in eastern NC just a few days ago; luckily we escaped! Thanks always Jacob, Betty