A Poem by Betty Hermelee

allegory of life, kindness




My tenuous wings

persistent wind blows

weakens my spirit

lazily slump

into a warm

wrinkled hand

my flaps forego

demise awaits


Stranger’s kindness

induces my second’s dream

wings fortify to fly

once again

kiss the flowers

hop the grass



This day

my life’s story

edges towards

the earth’s abyss

where my fellow

extinct butterflies


in this totality




© 2021 Betty Hermelee

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This poem is something amazing, but especially the last few lines. A truly beautiful piece that describes that 'butterfly' feeling and each word you use is so deep and adds an extra layer to this already wonderful piece. I always love when people use butterflies in poetry but this is one of the best ones I've seen!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago

Betty Hermelee

3 Weeks Ago

WOW! What an amazing review!!! Thank you so much, it is so appreciated., Best, B
Butterflies are free, but a kind hand reaching out...makes it worth giving up that freedom and finding
compromise and love in flying together.
I have found that total strangers might give us more of a reason to smile than those who are
so close to family or those we think are friends but then find out they derive from a hornet's nest with the purpose of stinging our hearts, causing us pain.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago

Betty Hermelee

3 Weeks Ago

How right you are Jacob; I can think more of perfect strangers' kindness than half of my family!!! .. read more
Strong, specific words, without frills but - sighs to accept, wonder at then, move onwards to the next mystery. A day can hold mystery and learning wrapped in the desire to not merely look but SEE and - even more, FEEL. Your writing takes a theme, takes it to heart, sees the truth in it. Shows amazing skill.

Thank you for sharing, Betty. Keep safe, take care.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago

Betty Hermelee

3 Weeks Ago

Thanks so much Emma for an in depth review; you always have intuitive things to say.
You take.. read more

3 Weeks Ago

Returned to edit such a rambling review, so very sorry for that, Betty. x

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Added on April 18, 2021
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Betty Hermelee
Betty Hermelee

Black Mountain, NC

My love of poetry resulted from my love of art. As a painter I am able to express myself on a canvas. As a poet my words come from my heart, my moods, sometimes sad, mostly upbeat. I like to use vivid.. more..


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