TIME EBBS

body and soul

TIME EBBS

 

I float placidly on the surface

Yet my spirit lays distant

In a cavernous sea

Notions of darkness

Flood my depths

Time ebbs

My core runs aground

Sea Goddess sighs

Whispers

Bubbles of solace

She clutches my soul

Elevates me to the shallow

I am unbroken, complete

 

Author's Note

your body can be in one place and your spirit in another......

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem dear Betty.
"Yet my spirit lays distant
In a cavernous sea
Notions of darkness
Flood my depths"
The above lines, I did adore. I could write a epic tale from. We do need mystical places to gather our minds and heart. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
Time ebbs

[Betty Hermelee]

you're welcome dear friend
Best, B.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Betty.

[Lathen Griffiths]

I experienced a similar feeling whilst snorkelling in the Red Sea, my body serene on the surface, gazing down hundreds of meters, I’m sure my spirit was elsewhere. Thanks for sharing your lovely words and reminding me of a wonderful moment.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Lathen for visiting and reviewing my poem
Best
Betty

[Chris Shaw]

So much truth in the fact that your body can be in one place while your soul is in another. Floating in the sea is an incredibly spiritual experience. One small person in a vast ocean that can change mood easily. Salt water is healing. I think I would benefit from this right now.. Warm water though Betty because I am a wimp :) Thank you fir the gift of your poetry. Have a wonderful day.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks so much Chris for a lovely review, yes I prefer warm water too! Have a wonderful day and weekend!
Best
B.

[Einstein Noodle]

brilliant says i! ... the imaging, story, setting and scene all in tune as she lets go into the deep .. there is danger but ..... she floats ... finds a true ground .. all's well .. really like this line "Bubbles of solace" .. i think your poem takes minimalism to the max ... there is absolutely no fat remaining one could possible trim and still give such a whole package .. well done .. the mind is a funny thing ... we have no idea it's boundaries nor capabilities but it is of necessity, humbled by our finite existence ... inspiring thoughts, Betty .. glad i did not miss this one.
E.

[Betty Hermelee]

Wow! Such a magnificent review, so glad you enjoyed it. I actually love writing brevity poems and packing a lot into a little….best, B.

[Miss Sharon]

(your body can be in one place and your spirit in another......) So very true my dear! I love his write. ~Sharon

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much for a lovely review!
Best, B.

[Dave Brown]

A nicely offered peaceful moment
I used to spend a great deal of time in the water but I had to keep my mind and spirit in the same spot to ensure I wouldn't drown
Of course, that's just me

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you dear Dave! I prefer to float with my mind elsewhere!
Best, B.

[John the Baptist]

What I get from this one is the sense of being trapped by somber memories and the passage of time. However, a spiritual experience breaks the spell of the deep and elevates the drifter to wholeness.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you John, yes the body floats serenely, but the soul is far away and dark. Well done!😊

[lessa (kenzie)]

That is so true, I love sitting with a good cup of tea or coffee and get lost in a moment, This is wonderful

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much Alex, appreciate it.
Best
Betty

[Patricia]

water poems always get me, have a fear of water, but have pleasant dreams about water, go figure. My spirit is frequently out to lunch somewhere beautiful, the rest of me, well it aches and wants to lay down. :) I love this write, water and all. thank you

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks so much for a lovely review. I love to wiite about water as welll😊
Best, B.

[Patricia]

you're welcome and always a pleasure to read your words

[Betty Hermelee]

You too!!! Happy Thanksgiving!
Best, B