BANANA FLOAT

pulled by the river, not crushed by the river

BANANA FLOAT

River current

totes me in

ripples of fantasy

my spirit, a banana float

allow echoes of water

to swish my core

jugs of sweet wine

Author's Note

River pulls me along, not crushes me

Reviews

[John the Baptist]

Not sure what a banana float is, but the poem seems to say don't resist the current. If you do, it will overwhelm you and you will be carried along anyway. Let the water cleanse you negatives. Not sure about the sweet wine, though; I prefer the dry stuff now. Had a few sweet wine hangovers in my youth, experiences I came to refer to as the wrath of grapes.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks so much John; yes you're right, the river is not torturing, but soothing as it carries her away not meant to crush but to calm....Best, B

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

I'm going to go out on a limb and guess this lovely poem is about an alcohol drink. If so I want one, though I will probably not stop there haha. It sounds absolutely delicious. Excellent write B.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks Carlos; no, it's really not about alcohol, though I do mention it, my thought is the river being a source of calming rather than crushing...
a pleasantry, rather than a horrible experience having to fight the currents....the booze though is the calming part!!!! Best, B

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

I don't know if I ever mentioned this before B but at around age 13 I actually drowned in a river. Totally my fault of course but scary as hell. But as I passed out in the water I remembered a peacefulness coming over me and pulling me to sleep. A few minutes later I would find myself waking up and coughing out lots of water. I know what it was like fighting the currents and losing. But I also know it wasn't truly a fight but an awakening to something or someplace else. That residual memory of just peace in a silence of darkness. I have a greater respect and appreciation for water now. It is malleable in so many mysterious ways. I know it changed me. Even to this day I'm still drawn to it whether a sea, river, lake, or stream. You are absolutely correct it is calming and peaceful.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for your very honest and well written thoughts….a terrifying story but a new respect for water, it’s terror and it calmness
Best to you, B