GHOSTLY QUIETUDE

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GHOSTLY QUIETUDE

 

Suspicions emerge

When silence hides behind the moon

Once cozy eves, fine friends and wine

Now burrowing dialogue consumes

To dance in circumspect steps

Aware that somethings are amiss

When absences of length

Transform into ghostly quietude

 

Is there a secret not yet ripe?

Perhaps appalling misfortune

Bites those whose truth

Is buried in the sand

Which slowly meanders into the deep earth

 

Once the truth bursts

Is the dance floor too crowded?

Is the songster fearful to sing?

Is the dialogue too cogent?

 

We will evermore know

As the cavity among us emerges

Into an ocean of doomed waves

And we shan’t foregather

In the midway

Reviews

[Unspoken poet]

Bites those whose truth
Is buried in the sand
Which slowly meanders into the deep earth

Wow, wonderful lines here, This is wonderful...
a deep earth is a long way to go, constant energy there
I can feel some hope left. Awesome write

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for your lovely review!
Best, Betty

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome!

[Coyote Poetry]

Dear Betty. This is honest and true poetry. When we see, sometimes barely the truth.
"To dance in circumspect steps
Aware that somethings are amiss
When absences of length
Transform into ghostly quietude"
I did like the above lines. A ghostly quietude. Maybe I had a few? Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks much John for your great review!
Best, B

[Coyote Poetry]

Hello dear Betty and you are welcome.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Betty.. would it be Safe to mingle on a 🎡 Ferris Wheel… Plenty of Space and Air.. It seems we are all Ghosts wearing Masks quietly… gently, Pat

[Betty Hermelee]

Dearest Pat, you can fine the positives always, in my poem, even if they are very dark! Good for you!
Truly B.

[Patricia]

Extra points and a kudos for using shan’t!!! This is fab! Love the second stanza and questioning in poetry is so cool…ponder, ponder, ponder I love to sit in the middle of a poem and ponder then reread and ponder, now that is poetry! Great work B!

[Betty Hermelee]

A great review as alway p.
Thanks
Hugs
B.

[JE Falcon]

Once again, your first line grabbed ahold of me, and off I went visualizing all the way.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you JF for your kind review!
Best, B.

[Ken Simm.]

Almost gothic. Tht is how I see this on first reading. And that is what I enjoy about it. Very visual for me also. As if one has filmed the scene. The darkness creeps into the cosyness and warmth. Excellent writing.

[Betty Hermelee]

Dearest Ken, I am flattered, and thank you for your review.
Best, B

[Dave Brown]

This is beauty
excellent scene creation, further enhanced by the use of intriguing language, all creating lots of emotion.
Wish I could come up with sort of quality write
Do you offer lessons?

[Betty Hermelee]

you're making me blush!!! Thanks so much my dear Dave, always appreciated.
Best, B

[Gee]

This poem reminds me of the death throes of the marriage of friends of ours, the suspicions, silence finally giving way to pure, unbridled hatred, divorce and kids with split allegiance...sad.
Really good write Betty
Are you and your bum back from the South ?

[Betty Hermelee]

Great Review Gee!
Thanks B.
PS We're still in the south, writing from here!!!

[Lisasview]

From to first line to the end I was hooked... Story line and metaphors rolled off the pages...
Fabulous write..Really enjoyed it.
Lisa

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks for stopping by and writing such a thoughtful review.
Best,
Betty

[Lisasview]

You are quite welcome..
I just finished submitting two Sonnets.. never having done anything like this before..
A real challenge,
Lisa

[Vertigo Cat1111]

This is such a beautiful poem that tells a story with it, and the metaphors are amazing as well. ‘Suspicious emerge when silence hides behind the moon.’ What an amazing starting line! The imagery is haunting and dark, but another particularly great line is, ‘once the truth bursts, is the dance floor too crowded?’ That’s an purely atmospheric and such a cool line. Thank you so much for sharing!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for a fine review!
Best, B.