A PERCENT OF OUR PASSION

THE TOUCH

A PERCENT OF OUR PASSION

 

Naught does it matter

If you cannot see my green eyes

You discern my shadow large

In the full moonlight

I am close, touch my face

It drives my core to tingle

I trace the outline

Of your nose, a miniscule bump

Sparks me to giggle

I fancy the breath from your perfect nostrils

 

Pronto, you trace the outline of my lips

Do they hold your imagination in a trance?

Are they faint, portly?

Let us bring our bodies closer

In a tight squeeze, as if we are one

I can sense your twitch, your excitement

Can you savvy mine?

Here we are, entwined

likewise, our shadows

as if the moon is a percent of our passion

 

Reviews

[alanwgraham]

Very well done Betty with this luscious poem - it drives my core to tingle! You have composed loads of lovely images to describe this erotic encounter. There is something about moonlight which stirs passion.
You have excelled yourself with this one.
All the best,
Alan

[Betty Hermelee]

Wow! Thank you Alan for such a lovely review, much appreciated.
Best
B.

[Dave Brown]

I would be inclined to feel that the moon is always a percent of passion
As JtheB would say, some heavy breathing stuff here Betty.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks always Dave for your review….
“Best Betty”

[Einstein Noodle]

ohhhhhhhhhhh ..i savvy baby!!!! you are so very good .. have not read a poem so soundly inviting me into it ... and the moon ... "La Luna, bella Luna!" .. just a percentage .. brilliant .. wish i wrote and read this to someone .. on that moon lit night .. balmy breeze and drunk with our youth .. ahhhhhhhh! and the playful approach makes the electricity all the more appealing .. great stuff young lady .. really like this one!
E.

[Betty Hermelee]

Ahhhh Einstein
You are so eloquent with this review, make me feel great!
Best
B.

[Andrew John]

Good to see a nose as a minuscule bump. Nice piece of verse, this one, Betty. Thank you.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Andrew for stopping by to review my poem, much appreciated.
Best
Betty

[Robert Haigh]

The romance of moonlight! A romantic and passionate poem, tastefully done. We all need love and romance in our lives! Nicely penned poem!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks!!!!

[Betty Hermelee]

Having some problems with my laptop, but a lovely review!
Best, B

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Betty… I just posted a poem that is a Shadow of your Poem… we both must be Moon Gazers in June passion poems…. Enjoy the last days of the Moon in June and the Romantic Rendezvous … Moonbeams… gently, Pat

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Pat for your lovely review; brilliant poets think alike!!! Truly,
B.

[Ranger Kessel]

Very nice imagery in this. I could envision what it was i was reading. I enjoyed this

[Betty Hermelee]

Than you so much Ranger, much appreciated!

[SM]

This is beautiful writing ! held my breath for a second. vivid and magical scenario set out in the moonlight.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you SM, a thoughtful review!

[Chris Shaw]

Moonlight, it does set the scene for romance. This is sensual writing Betty. I felt the heat here. You create lovely imagery with these lines. Good job done.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you dear Chris, always appreciated.
Best.
B.

[John the Baptist]

A very romantic offering here, verging on the erotic. One more verse and the sap would have overflowed.

[Betty Hermelee]

But not quite! I almost hit the jackpot…thank you, much appreciated John.
Best
B.