THE CONCLUSION

THE CONCLUSION

A Poem by Betty Hermelee
"

and so it goes....

"


I must decide regarding a visit to the gentleman

this I shall do in the park across the way

ts a sunny day with a cool breeze

and the fresh air shall help clear my mind

I walk at a swift pace to exercise my wobbly legs

the smell of fresh cut grass is luscious

and a hint of rose scent is in the air

a perfect place for contemplation

 

I locate a bench under a large oak tree

and view the sun as it peeks through

the branches thick with leaves

I watch people stroll by with prams, tricycles, and roller skates

a bit chaotic, I move to a more remote bench

not to be distracted from deep thought

now I am in a sunny spot where warmth shrouds

my shoulders

 

I remove his note from my purse and read it over and over

and try to understand all the consequences it may have on me

if I pay him a visit

I tally up all the pros and cons

and opt to visit the gentlemen

primarily out of loneliness

yet for affection as well

 

My day for the visit arrives

my body shakes all over

I wear my best outfit that does not show my belly

a bit tight, yet stunning, with trench coat

wads of makeup and a fine hairdo

I pace the room several times and look in the mirror

I am ready

 

 

The cab ride is about fifteen minutes

all the while I pick my fingers and powder my nose

the cab arrives at his address

a Tudor style house with lovely shade trees in front

quite a few steps to the entrance

I pay the cab driver

I ring the bell

and wait

at once, he opens the door

and recognizes me with a smile

straight behind him is a pretty woman

he introduces her as a friend

I feel faint, light-headed, embarrassed, angry

I turn around and race down the steps

he runs after me and calls my name,

he catches up and speaks some words I cannot understand

I still run quickly, stop once, look back and he disappears

 

I am out of breath with sobs and shakes

find a bench to catch my breath

wipe my tears, wheeze, cough, sniffle

what did I do?

I blame myself for this visit

how shall I overcome?

 

At long last I calm myself

and through all my anguish

over all I have suffered, I have come to understand

that I am not alone anymore

I have a child who is growing in my belly and I hope to have all the love and affection I have missed for so long

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 


© 2024 Betty Hermelee


Author's Note

Betty Hermelee
THE END! Thank you for those of you who supported me in this venture, much appreciated!

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sad, sort of anticlimactic which sometimes makes for the best ending. it is what it is. she seems at peace with her decision and is hopeful. i could see this as a movie.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

4 Months Ago

Thanks always Pete for a great review, glad you like the ending… didn’t want it to be a fairytal.. read more
i am drawn in and taken on a varied cadence ride .. as the story progressed, i, more and more, felt anticipated let down but held out hope .. the man she visited a quick, quiet mystery as she fled .. and the closing .. her with child but finally resolved as to her own self worth and independence ... with a new life to give herself to .. nice story telling .. smooth and change up, rhythm .. totally enjoyed .. i'm glad your hero ran :)
E.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

4 Months Ago

What an awesome review E.... thank you, loved it!!!
Warmly, B
Betty, this really is great, including everything a love story needs - plus!
You have voiced the woman's actions and thoughts so well, added touches of architecture, dialogue.
and general style which could possibly mean research or - a very fine brain!
As to the tale, well.. my goodness what an adventurer is the main character and how did she come to be such a woman.. what to think, whether or not to judge or, accept that 'things' do happen - at times. How it ends is yet another story, perhaps sad, but for sure, as written by you, will be a tale of courage and more.

I can see this as a top-liner, even a movie or TV series. However, dear friend, I truly found this a gently gathered book, a romance with much to think about - start to finish. Please sign just inside the cover!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

OMG!!! You are too much!! I would say A++++ such an amazing review my sweet EM! Love it and will ch.. read more
emmajoygreen

5 Months Ago

Trying hard to catch up on reviews I should have acknowledged ages ago, delete some of my scribbles,.. read more
Betty Hermelee

4 Months Ago

Til what?🙃
Despite the resolute declaration by this lady at the end, my heart aches for her too much, she lost so much love yet she is being responsible and brave enough to carry her future on her own, it tells me the story of many women who were turned down by their love at such a delicate stage of their lives, this poem has touched my heart, it was hopeful for a happy ending. This story was a emotional ride, you really made sure of it with every update, glad to read this my friend ❤️

Posted 5 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

So glad you supported me in this endeavor, and a wonderful review, Thank you!
Warmly, B
A beautiful story telling though poetry. Like a song, like a screen play I felt. Great writing

Posted 5 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

Thank you TP for your support in this endeavor and your very kind review🌷
Warmly, B
I feel heart broken for the lovely lady as I read this very poignant ending. All her presumptions vanished into thin air with her visit to the gentleman. It is wonderful that she is taking a different view now, prioritising her beautiful baby and herself. There is a sad sense of closure with her lovely soldier and I feel he will forever be lovingly remembered in her heart and that love for him passed on to their darling baby as the years roll by. I am hoping to see your wonderful story in book form, dear Betty. Heartiest Congratulations on the completion of this very hauntingly poignant story. You are an amazing writer with the biggest and most beautiful wordsmith's heart. Thank you for sharing, dear Betty...

Posted 5 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

Dear Marie
That is the most beautiful review; thank you for that and all of support, it means.. read more
Marie

5 Months Ago

Most welcome always, dear Betty... 🌹♥️🌹
A write of the dilemma between desire and fear of consequences. The decision to pursue desire and accompanying fear as well as the perception of slowing of time in nicely used. The disappointment of fallen expectations and the redirecting of thoughts in a positive direction give a sense of closure. Nicely done Betty.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

Thank you Soren. For a lovely review and all.of your support, much appreciated…
Warmly, B�.. read more
There are many encounters in
Life… and carrying a Baby to live a fruitful and blessed Life is a Gift to Treasure… perhaps we need to be in Awe when People are Musicians and Artists with many Movements and brush strokes to be talented and compassionate. Your Novel is like Needlework… one Stitch at a Time with Innuendoes softly, Pat

Posted 5 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

dear Pat
Thank you for your very loving and peaceful review
your support is so meaning.. read more
I had a feeling the guy was something of a rake, and the conclusion does not remove that impression, though we don't know the identity of the woman in the apartment. One thing is certain, though. The young lady now knows where her responsibility and her future lie. We can't tell how things will go for her, but we can't help but wish her well, despite her mistakes. The story kept my interest from start to finish, B. I hope you can get it published.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

Dear John...you are an angel! I thank you for all the reviews of this series and constant supportread more
I was hoping for her but still think this is very well written and real life is not like that is it? An excellent ending for all that . It does not take the reader for granted and builds the tension rather well. Whilst still leaving another ending should you wish.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

5 Months Ago

Thank you Ken for for port and great reviews of this series, much appreciated dear friend
War.. read more

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Betty Hermelee

Black Mountain, NC



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My love of poetry results from my love of art. As a painter I am able to express myself on a canvas. As a poet my words come from my heart, my moods, sometimes sad, mostly upbeat. I like to use vivid .. more..

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