Had Something

Having personal experiences helps with my writing. I found that out the hard way.

                     I used to have something that I could call mine.
                             
                     I would treat it like a queen, in my own mind.
                                    
                        Where it went, it went far far away.
                                   
                        If it's ment to be, I'll see it one day

                      That's what they say, thats what I'm told.

                   These emotions can't stay, they can not be controlled.

                     If I could go back before I entered this painful maze.

                    I would give my life to convince her to stay.

 

         By:  Adam Ridge

Author's Note

I'm kinda iffy about a few punctuation errors. Feel free to help me out.

Reviews

[Constance]

You know, grammar and punctuation have little to do with talent in writing, because all in all, writing is about expression, art, sharing, communicating. It's just nice and lucky when your grammar allows you to communicate a bit clearer.
I loved this. You will see it one day. I have faith in that. Well done, and so glad you entered this in my contest. Thank you very much.

[East of Eden]

I agree with an earlier comment that the emotion in your writing is more important than the grammar. I really like this because it's so raw and honest. Keep writing!

[Prose-full]

strongfully emotional..
great write...

[Melanie Jane Boicourt S..]

I believe that this "ment " should be spelled like this 'meant'.
Think of 'meaning' to remember it next time, or it may have been just a typo.
Anyway, nice writing.
Thank you for sharing.
Love All, Mejasha

[Kaitlyn]

I LOVE the last part! this poem is great! I can tell it has a a powerfull story behind it and the way you worded it made it amazing

[patricia 2010]

wow
i love the last part
would give my life to convince her to stay.
your really good
Great job.

[Riley]

I like this alot. Its really meaningful. It makes me smile but at the same time makes me sad. Great job.

[Kelsie :]]

awww i love the last line. it made the poem special...its funny u try to give anything for someone and they some how move past it all. great work :)

[Cece]

who cares about punctuation errors
i just put where i want a pause

[The Musings of Mary H.]

Altogether a wonderful poem! I'm not a good one to judge for punctuation errors as I have the same difficulty sometimes. I find that if a poem is good and keeps rolling, I don't notice little things like that.
I have friends that do though...I let this be their strength. Good work!

"If it's ment to be, I'll see it one day"