Walking Cobwebs

Walking Cobwebs

A Poem by William Michael Reeves
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My first attempt at a pantoum

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I am standing still in life's busy street
I did not know who or what I should be
Got walking cobwebs all over my feet
Walking cobwebs have got a hold on me

I did not know who or what I should be
So upon apathy I took a seat
Walking cobwebs have got a hold on me
Responsibility I've tried to beat

So upon apathy I took a seat
Spiders of doubt were not letting me see
Responsibility I've tried to beat
Webs of lethargy hang in my brain's tree

Spiders of doubt were not letting me see
Motivation has become obsolete
Webs of lethargy hang in my brain's tree
Dusty thoughts of living are incomplete

Motivation has become obsolete
When walking cobwebs won't set my mind free
Dusty thoughts of living are incomplete
Decayed shadows of my future forsee

When walking cobwebs won't set my mind free
Commitment and retreat always compete
Decayed shadows of my future forsee
I am still standing in life's busy street

2021







© 2021 William Michael Reeves


Author's Note

William Michael Reeves
I cleared the cobwebs out long ago. This is based on dusty memories of lethargy.

Writing this made Billigami's brain feel all warm and fuzzy! Thanks for telling me about pantoums Mattavalli. Working on a sonnet now. I need to do a Cinquain and Chaiku. Any other forms I should try?

I went with 10 syllables per line. I intentionally flipped the words in the last line.

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ahahaha "Walking Cobwebs" ! I love it sir! you capture the irony of of indecision and apathy very well says i! and i really appreciate the spiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiderrrrrrrrrrrrrrrs ... making their way into me noddle .. really nice work ... not easy at all to accomplish a proper pantoum .. forms such as these are not an easy task for me but present a very clear challenge .. lots of working and reworking to have it make sense in every day language ... i won't even begin to check for accuracy and accountability to be true to the form .. i still have a headache for the one i worked on several years ago .. i ran it past Richard who has given me suggestions and corrections which i still have not used; but i have his mail saved and i will get it done one of these days ... cobwebs and spiders being what they are ;)))))))))))))))))))))))))))))) great job! loved the read .. so relatable in many situations
E.

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William Michael Reeves

1 Week Ago

Thanks E. It is tricky thinking a couple steps ahead and try to have it make sense. I'm trying to wr.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Week Ago

yes .. it is still posted .. i'll find it and send give you the link or a read request .. a senryu f.. read more



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Ada
This was a nice metaphor; you do a nice job of showing how life's complexity is like a cobweb, which makes this a unique write.

Posted 3 Days Ago


ahahaha "Walking Cobwebs" ! I love it sir! you capture the irony of of indecision and apathy very well says i! and i really appreciate the spiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiderrrrrrrrrrrrrrrs ... making their way into me noddle .. really nice work ... not easy at all to accomplish a proper pantoum .. forms such as these are not an easy task for me but present a very clear challenge .. lots of working and reworking to have it make sense in every day language ... i won't even begin to check for accuracy and accountability to be true to the form .. i still have a headache for the one i worked on several years ago .. i ran it past Richard who has given me suggestions and corrections which i still have not used; but i have his mail saved and i will get it done one of these days ... cobwebs and spiders being what they are ;)))))))))))))))))))))))))))))) great job! loved the read .. so relatable in many situations
E.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

William Michael Reeves

1 Week Ago

Thanks E. It is tricky thinking a couple steps ahead and try to have it make sense. I'm trying to wr.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Week Ago

yes .. it is still posted .. i'll find it and send give you the link or a read request .. a senryu f.. read more
So, now Mr. Bill becomes a varied creator :> why not?! I see You are great in that, the poem flows smoothly from your brain to ours. I love the idea of walking cobwebs. I love spiders (NOT the scary ones) but like the Daddy Long Legs ones, anyway... as thin and fragile as the cobweb is, as it's complex in structure, yet look at the result. a fine piece of art. that's how life... we can create something beautiful from almost nothing. anyway cleansing is important for our minds, hearts, and spirits. Happy cleansing and creating Bill and William :>

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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William Michael Reeves

3 Weeks Ago

Your review made me realize I had no thought of what kind of spider. Daddy long legs are perfect! Fu.. read more
This reminded me of a pop song by Gwen Stefani's old band, No Doubt, "Walking into Spiderwebs". I've never been much of one for poetic forms and mold casting. It was okay to experiment with when I was in high school and college...so long ago. It helps one learn discipline and challenges the psyche a bit. But I found over the years that my favorite poets and master poets were those whose only guidelines were the feelings in their hearts, Emily Dickinson, for one example, shunned the literary "form" to create her own style and voice her own heart. And I absolutely love her thoughts on what she thought poetry should be. She said, "“If I read a book and it makes my whole body so cold no fire can warm me, I know that is poetry. If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry. These are the only ways I know it. Is there any other way?” I enjoyed the read. Merry Christmas.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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William Michael Reeves

3 Weeks Ago

Thanks Fabien. I'm with you. For 40 years I've been writing establishing my own unique parameters an.. read more
William Michael Reeves

3 Weeks Ago

Fabian. Sorry
Fabian G. Franklin

3 Weeks Ago

It's fine. I've been enjoying my Christmas present from my brother, an 1886 edition of Longfellow's .. read more
Glad for the author's note indicating the cobwebs were overcome, because I thought I was reading a description of depression. The cobweb imagery and the repeated references to apathy and lethargy are characteristic of those spiraling downward. At the far edge of such a descent are images of guns and blades and bottles of toxic pills. Below depression lies despair, and then it's only a matter of time.

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William Michael Reeves

3 Weeks Ago

The time came and went in many strikes of my clock throughout life. You touch a point...when we pen .. read more
I so enjoyed the repetition. A well written pantoum. Not easy to write this form. Kudos to you. Glad you were able to clear out the cobwebs....only you can do that. Lydi**

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William Michael Reeves

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you. Trying every form.
Well done you Bill for trying out a pantoum. The repetition works very well. I have never tried one of these. Haven't got the patience these days. Apathy can visit us all from time to time. Best shaken off I think.

Chris

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William Michael Reeves

3 Weeks Ago

Tricky to write for sure! Need to think ahead knowing you're last line has to be the first and start.. read more
Chris Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

Merry Christmas to you too :)
Spiders of doubt were not letting me see
Motivation has become obsolete
Webs of lethargy hang in my brain's tree
Dusty thoughts of living are incomplete

I really love this part, this is wonderful. I also love the flow and rhyme scheme

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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William Michael Reeves

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you! Mattavalli suggested I try a pantoum and the first stanza of this were song lyrics I wrot.. read more
What I like is how you express yourself in a light hearted way but with a very deep and insightfull way. I know all too well what you are saying here. I don'y how many times I had to stand still in order to find which wy is best to move forward.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Glad you were able to set those cobwebs free…otherwise you’d be stuck in this mire of conflict within, not knowing which direction to seek.
I think we all go through that feeling at different times in our lives…kudos to you!
Best and merry everything!
Betty

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William Michael Reeves

3 Weeks Ago

We all do at some point. Kick the cobwebs off and run into our lives. I was challenged to write a pa.. read more

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William Michael Reeves
William Michael Reeves

Seattle, WA



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I live in Seattle. I have been a nurses aide most of my life and my experiences as a caregiver for people with disabilities has inspired much of my poetry. I love the puzzle of poetry. Expression with.. more..

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