Dreamdrops

Finding Synergy in dreams

As dusk was rising on my day,
and rainshine falls, I end my play.
A bed of clouds for slumber calls ...
this tired mind jus'cannot stay.
I end my play and rainshine falls,
to rest the storm that sleeping stalls.

'Pon pillows soft as feathers light
my dreamdrops fell all through the night.
I see what raining stories tell;
their patter sounds strange thoughts in flight
all through the night, my dreamdrops fell ~
made sure that I did sleep so well.

You caught my cloud that floated by;
so please don't pull, I'm in the sky!
My fluffy pillow's really full
of fantasies, and dreams that fly.
I'm in the sky so please don't pull ~
my days 'n nights are never dull.

I'm upside down I wake to find;
made sunfall fill my lucid mind.
Then setting dawn disturbed the still,
as fuzzy memories rewind.
My lucid mind made sunfall fill
this day with life, love, and goodwill.

Then off to play I am again...
our planet rolled, I'm fairly certain;
'cause right side up the sun extolled
my hopes that open closed curtains.
I'm fairly certain our planet rolled
in drops of dreams ~ where I have strolled.

2023

Author's Note

This is my second attempt at writing in a form Susan🦋 developed she calls 'Synergy'. My first attempt 'Tickled Pink' was wrong. Lines 2 and 5 flip and swap, not just the rhyme. I like this form. It's a little like fusing a ballad with a Pantoum or Villanelle.

Reviews

[Lisasview]

Oh gosh Michael,
You are really so good at tis and understanding what is needed in structure.
I am still working at understanding...
I broke my clavicle and so I have not been writing much...
BUT, I plan on finishing another one tis week.
Goo to be in touch...again,
Lisa

[William Michael Reeves]

I did get this one wrong the first time around. But persevered. The form Susan developed is as much fun to write in and perfect for some ideas I had rolling around in my head. Ideas that were dropping into my dreams. Good to hear from you again ... from there in Spain. I was wondering where you've been. In pain in Spain apparently. Thanks for the nice review.

If you're interested in this form go to my poem Tickled Pink. There's a good description in Richard's review.

[Lisasview]

Great, I will...
Lisa

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree Williams. We must keep our dreams. Amazing dance of words and thoughts. I did enjoy the poetry my friend. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[William Michael Reeves]

Thank you. I keep my dreams stashed under my pillow. When it starts to get lumpy I drain the dreamdrops into my pen.

Williams

[Patricia]

this is really great writing, well done, great ending! I love a good ending.

[William Michael Reeves]

Glad you appreciate an ending. I've always felt it's really important. Try to lift or resolve. Thanks.

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

I just read your poem "Dreamdrops" and I was enchanted by the way that you've captured the beauty and wonder of the natural world. Your use of language is so evocative and poetic, and I loved the way that you wove together different images and sensations to create a dreamlike atmosphere.
Your descriptions of the rain and the clouds, and the way that they interact with your dreams and thoughts, are so vivid and imaginative. I felt like I was right there with you, floating in the sky and watching the world below.
Overall, I thought that your poem was a beautiful tribute to the power of the imagination and the magic of the natural world.

[Miss Sharon]

Wowser! What an awesome write. I love the form but it looks too challenging for me to attempt. ~Sharon

[Nima.Hope]

fluffy-lucid and many other great words, I can't express my happiness from the new words. You are very literate in poetry Bill. Masterfully described with elements of nature, reminds me of Rumi and Saadi.
Nice job and bravo Bill. You always nail it:)

[William Michael Reeves]

Thanks Nima. Coining phrases is some of the best parts of writing poetry. We can let our imagination roll! I'll be looking for some Rumi and Saadi. Thanks

[Nima.Hope]

You're always welcome dear Bill

[Throwing Romeo]

Impressive go at it!
Enjoyed reading.
Especially like the playful lingering melodic strum.
R

[William Michael Reeves]

Thanks for throwing me a review Romeo. Susan's form does feel lyrical. The flipping and swapping is fun wordplay. Thank you

[Throwing Romeo]

Keep up the effort!!!

[Betty Hermelee]

form form....I'm looking for the splendid words you use and your soft pillow upon which your head gently lays... to start a dream that takes you on a journey of coeds, fantasizes, upside down, fuzzy emeories....you crafted this this well my friend,,,enjoyed every word!
Best, B

[William Michael Reeves]

I'm glad you found my words ... splendid! An original form formulated by Susan's dreams of inspiring another poet. Which she has. I'm not quite sure where you got coeds though, Betty? Not that a coed hasn't dropped into my dreams on occasion. That would be a completely different form ... of wet dream!

Thanks B

[Betty Hermelee]

TYPO... supposed to be journey of clouds! sorry
Best, B

[William Michael Reeves]

That's funny! If it was autocorrect I'm certain it intentionally messes with us. No coeds in my clouds unfortunately.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the idea of rainshine has to come from a lucid mind...
or a very poetic one.
if the planet is rolling, I hope it hits the pocket for a strike.
Good will brings the sun...and this poem dreams of hope.
j.

[William Michael Reeves]

Now that's an idea from your lucid mind! The gods play billiards with the celestial orbs. Maybe that's what a black hole is ... a pocket. Thanks for sharing in my dream of hoping to write something worthwhile.

[willweb]

Ok, here we go, periods and all. I read this a few times and once I got the rhythm down, it felt nice to read. Smooth and uncluttered. I like this style a lot too, I might have to give this a try someday. As for the poem and the theme...beautiful. Dreamdrops...man that was so cool. I wish I had thought of that. Really nicely done, and the grammar from what I see is spot on, but what do I know? Great work here my friend, bravo!!!

[William Michael Reeves]

I have to give lightsong a little credit. All of the ideas in this poem are part of our banter because she's on the other side of the planet. I kept trying to come up with different ways to have simultaneous rising dusk and setting dawn. Rainshine and sunfall. Dreamdrops came to me and it all has become a thing. When I discovered I had gotten Susan's form wrong the first time, seemed natural to use these ideas in another attempt. I didn't want the odd ideas to just get lost in mail. Like I mentioned, I seriously considered losing the punctuation. I'm glad to hear it read smoothly. Thanks will