Summer Slap

Poem practice, let me know what you think

CRISP N DRY

SMELLING LIKE A CHIP

BROTHER WON'T STOP PEELING

SO HE GOES FOR A DIP

MUMS SUNBURN AIN'T HEELING

SHES GROANING AND REELING

SO I GET AN EVIL FEELING

WITH A GREAT BIG CLAP

I SLAP HER ON THE BACK AND

LEAVE THE MAD WOMAN 

SQUEALING

Author's Note

Try enjoy, then feed me the good stuff. Constructively.

Reviews

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

delightfully telling of the scampish nature of youth, well done, good read.

[BlakeDuckers]

Thank you Mr Fitzgerald. I appreciate the review massively. I did this poem four in the morning and thought it was rubbish at the time. It's proving quite popular! Thank you again.

[R. L. Hill]

Too hilarious! This is so true. Oh the odd things we do to our families. Rather cruel, are we not? But then again, we build the best memories that way.

[BlakeDuckers]

Cruel is an understatement, when that sunburn is at peak pain. SLAP. Thank your Quirklet. What a mesmerizing name that is.

[R. L. Hill]

Hahah. Mesmerizing? I would say it's a bit quirky, wouldn't you agree? Definitely cruel action to play on family, but a memory nonetheless.

[BlakeDuckers]

What can i say I'm easily mesmerized! One of the best memories at that.

[Lyn Anderson]

This is very funny. I like it. I am the evil apostrophe police, however, and must say I would prefer to see MUM's and SHE's

[BlakeDuckers]

Noted, learnt, loving!

[BlakeDuckers]

Its better if you read it with rhythm, its so crappy reading it out normal.