Chapter Two

"Wake up...please please wake up..." Someone was shaking me....I could have sworn it was Saturday though...Didn't that mean no school? "...at least she's breathing so I know I didn't kill her..." Kill her? Was someone trying to kill me...how odd...and then it clicked. I opened my eyes to a boy peering at me with worry written on his face and in his eyes, those beautiful snow storm grey eyes. "Oh my goodness!" I sat straight up and scooted away into the corner. "I mean uh...."

"Are you ok? You were out for a good five minutes. I was a little worried you weren't going to wake back up." He stood up and stepped towards me. "What are you doing here? How did you find this place?" I demanded while I tried to get my thoughts in order. Why was he here...him of all people....had he always been that good looking? "I found this place a few days ago actually...when I ran-when I went exploring through the woods." He brushed his black emo styled hair out of his eyes...it even seemed to show shimmers of grey streaked through it. "How did YOU find this place?" He raised an eyebrow at me..." I found this place a long time ago when I was little. It's kind of my secret place...or well was." I looked at him pointedly. "Ah well sorry bout that...I guess I kinda took it as my secret place too." He glanced at my notebook. "Tiger Lily huh? I suppose I should have realized this place was taken, just didn't expect it to be you." "Excuse me? And what's that supposed to mean." I stood up with my arms crossed. "Also, Tiger Lilies happen to be my favorite flower, and in Peter Pan she was the pretty Indian Princess so hah!"

"Well you're Serenity Fox, everybody's best friend, the top french and acting student, President of the Creative Writing Club, and the youngest senior in your Dance School. Not exactly the person I pictured needing a secret place." He smirked. "You don't know what I need...and it disturbs me and flatters me a little at the same time that you know all that about me. Besides you don't seem to really need a hiding place either." I raised an eyebrow back. "Oh really and what do you know about me?" He smiled and I felt my heart flutter. "You're the new guy that everybody's been talking about at school. Somehow in a week you became President of the Computer Club and even though you're a freshman you're taking Pre Cal. You're also in three of my classes, but you keep to yourself in the back." "Vince Storm at your service." He took my hand in his and kissed it. "I see why you're president of the Creative Writing Club...those stories, those poems, they're beautiful. I'd like to get to know you better if you don't mind. Through you though not through your notebook." He was still holding my hand I think I actually forgot how to breath for a second. " I'm not quite sure how to react to you just yet." I answered honestly. The words kind of stumbled out. I wasn't wanting to be hurt more, my heart was all I had left. He dropped my hand and walked towards the window. "I'm not sure how to react to me either." I could hear the sadness in his voice and it made me want to cry. "I'm sorry...you kinda threw me off guard, what I mean is I'd love to be your friend, but first we have to see eye to eye on a few things. Number one, no one is to know about this place...and when I say no one I mean no friends, family, small animals...unless I can play with them, etc. etc." "Of course." He turned to face me with a grin on his face. "And number two....if you're gonna burn candles....you either burn the candle or the incense" I smiled at him as I picked up my half burned Vanilla Bean candle and blew it out. The room was dark with different shades of the blue sky that filtered into the room. It seemed when I fainted the moon took the sun's position in the sky. "As You Wish." I watched Vince's outline take a bow in my direction. Oh my gosh he used a quote from the Princess Bride...What had I gotten myself into....

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Skye]

I like this so far :) when I saw you has began posting s book, I just had to read it.
Just a few things though...
Why did she pass out when she saw him? I understand it was a big shock, but so big a shock that oxygen was deprived from her brain long enough to knock her unconscious? And before you had said that the sun was shining through the leaves, but in the five minutes she was out the sun set completely and the moon was high up in sky. Maybe I'm just being a tad to literal, it is fiction after all, I just had to point it out.
Any who, I kicked how you described the characters role in their school without making a monologue out of it, you just fit it into the conversation. I'd like to see, what is it, Vince? I'd like to see his reaction when he finds out about her home life.
I can see this becoming really really good! Would you mind a suggestion? ( yes I'm aware I've got two more chapters still) when you are wring, try to include what the main character feels or hears it smelks around her. For example,when she woke up, maybe the rough wood floor was biting into her back, or Vince's hands were warm, or the house smelled of moth eaten fabrics. Something that will help the reader connect not just with thereader but the surroundings too. It helps create a more ccomplete picture.
Overall, good job! I'll read more when I get back from the store :)

[Serenity Faith]

SKYE!!!! I always love hearing from you! I like your suggestions...and well...you'll find out Vince is....well you'll just have to wait and see xD I started writing this 6 years ago??? something like that....so it's not my best. I'm just trying to get out all that I had written and then fix em from there....it's a process at the moment >.< Thank you for such a thorough review!