Arguing With The Heavens

I look to the heavens,

and ask God why

Must these clouds,

mock my eyes

I'm ignored at first,

as the sky falls down

releasing it's tears

upon my crown.

The sky opens up,

did it hear my cry

Instead it yells back,

a thunderous reply

I keep my pace,

in the pouring rain

while the heavens call,

out all my pain

act as you do,

be that way

instead of offering,

a brighter day

I'm hurt, i'm sad,

I'm angry too

why Heaven's I ask,

what happened to you

The heavens pause,

for quite some time

a penny for its thoughts,

then it begins to shine

I smile to myself,

no need to disagree

you are only you

and I am only me

Reviews

[Armana D'Uscaret]

Emily,

I love this poem. It's that simple. It made me smile. :) More importantly, it made my day as it is incredibly hot here in Rome...we need some rain. Thanks!

[Coyote Poetry]

"The heavens pause,
for quite some time
a penny for its thoughts,
then it begins to shine"
A poem with a very good message. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

I like this. It's a different take on crying and the rain. The last two stanzas are a nice surprise and work for me. Nicely written.

[Sir Joe]

I love the way you ended the poem. So striking (=

[Vaen]

Love it :)

[Brandon Mathis]

wow that was at least the top 5 i have read in awhile hey check out me poems the way that this one sounds you will like mine i have i bunch of poems to still to be reviewed please help me out

[Skye]

Oh I love it! I was smiling at the end if this peom- even if I really wasn't supposed to. :D I WAS going to but down witch of the lines where my favorite, but the more I read, I began to realize I was just going to have to write down the whole thing!

[Serenity Faith]

Thank you very much. I'm glad that you smiled as I did ^_^

[Dean Kuch®]

It always seems (to me, at least) that on the days you feel your most distressed and discarded...it RAINS. I really like he way you use this in getting your message across to your readers.
The last two stanzas really hit home! Nicely done...

[Serenity Faith]

It's the same for me, actually. My sister-in-law once told me I must be an angel because it rained whenever I cried. I relate to nature very well. Thank you for a nice review.

[Enar]

Maybe its the rhyme, but this poem is good becuz it has a way of picking you up to follow the rest of the poem

i also like the emotion it gives!

[Serenity Faith]

Thank you as well. Most of the poems I've ever written have the flow of a ballad almost, at least that's what my Daddy used to say ^_^