A Broken Heart

A man loses what's most precious to him.

Emptiness consumed my very soul

Watching her lithe form depart.

I knew it wasn't her fault,

Yet I felt a desire to scream at her.

But my heart had been permanently shattered

And I could never pick up the pieces.

I wept at the thought of our last conversation.

We had been so very cruel to one another.

Emotions collided within me in waves,

Awaiting their freedom to be heard.

I had to refuse their requests,

Too much pain and sorrow...

A tragedy had destroyed us and our love,

And seeing me was too much for her.

Still I loved her always.

We still love our son,

Wherever he may be.

But I do not believe in Heaven nor Hell,

I knew the horrible truth.

The immutable fact that we would never,

ever see his beautiful smile again...

I can think of no remedy or balm

That could bring us back together,

As a family.

Only the hope she finds happiness someday and somewhere.

There is naught to do,

But simply grieve alone.

I will always love you, my Claire,

No matter what has befallen us.

Goodbye

Author's Note

Just let me know what you think. It's the first Poem I've written concerning the concept of Love, so be somewhat gentle.

Reviews

[Scarlett]

I just want to say, I'm not actually very good at reviewing. But I'm going to give it a go.

I like it. It's sad but I like it that way. My favourite part is this:
A tragedy had destroyed us and our love,
And seeing me was too much for her.
Still I loved her always.

Don't ask me why that is my favourite because I don't know. It just stood out to me. I love the way it's written. You can actually feel the emotions he going through. Good Job!!!

Small question. Is the picture Dean from Supernatural?

[Lovecraft]

Lol, yes that is Dean. I'm very into film and television. I love Supernatural, The Walking Dead, Mad Men, Breaking Bad, Dexter and other shows.

Thanks! ;)

[Silmara McGarry]

Woooow....I absolutely love it! My kind of poem. Had my eyes full of tears... Well written and emotionally described.

[Lovecraft]

Thank you very much, Sil! I have several poems like that. Try reading I'm Sorry, Baby Girl. People keep telling me how shocking and emotional it is.
*Nudge, Nudge, Wink, Wink* ;)

[Silmara McGarry]

Okey... I will ;-)

[Kesha]

Oh wow how heartbreaking and tragic. I cant even imagine what would become of my own husband if we were to lose either of our children. This piece is so very sad. You captured the pain wonderfully. Nicely done!

[Lovecraft]

Thank you! :)

[Kesha]

You're welcome

[Ayushi Beura]

The poem was for me really touching.
Loved your literature skills
Its shine like a diamond on a golden ring
really expressive and an incredible write!!!

[Lovecraft]

Thank you very much!

[Ayushi Beura]

My pleasure

[Lovecraft]

I'm about to play Fallout 2, so tomorrow I'm gonna view and review some of your work. ;)

[Ayushi Beura]

Oh come on its absolutely fine:)

[mercy party]

nicely done. it felt vulnerable. the word selection didn't seem placed it felt very real. i was with you on this one all the way. good!

[Lovecraft]

Thanks, Mercy! :)

Would it surprise you at all to know I have never been married and have no children? ;P

[mercy party]

actually, that does surprise me. As an Author you seem seasoned in that department. that's a twist for sure.

[Lovecraft]

Thanks, I'm just fairly intuitive in these things, I guess. :D

[Octavia]

You write about emotion very clearly and bluntly. Even so, I feel them clearly which is a powerful combination.

I like that this poem tells a story and that we get the details of it as we go along. The writer clearly is struggling with their emotions and is trying to deal with them even as they tell the story. It almost feels like little burst of sorrow and information, as if dwelling on either one too long would be too much but alternating between them he is able to finally choke out this expression of remorse and sadness.

Lovely work. I very much enjoyed it.

[Lovecraft]

Thanks, glad you liked it. This was actually the first poem I ever wrote that dealt with love and its associated themes. I can't help but tinge most of my writing with at least a hint of darkness though. My mind tends to travel through the course of darker themes and emotions of human nature.

[Octavia]

Mine as well, which is why I think I found your work so compelling. It reminds me of my own characters.

[Lovecraft]

You should also turn your pen to dark poetry too, not just short stories and such. I can imagine you would do quite well. :)

[Octavia]

I used to. It has been a long while. I might dig one out and post it. Couldn't hurt anything, right?

[Lovecraft]

Of course it could never hurt. I've received quite a few good reviews on some of my darker work, such as my poem I'm Sorry, Baby Girl and some other works.

[Coyote Poetry]

Honest, true and sad poetry for love.
"I will always love you, Claire,
No matter what befalls us."
I liked the above lines. You create a place of love that left and left people with regret and memory. Thank you Lovecraft for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Lovecraft]

Thank you yet again. Gotta say I really enjoy receiving reviews from you dude. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed your poetry and you are welcome.

[Meg Valen]

This is beautiful, but so very sad. I agree with M.L. Franchello, the emotions are so big, but so feeling and relatable in a way to someone in one way or another. I'm sorry about the passing of your brother you had mentioned in a prior comment. Your work is insightful and powerful.

[Lovecraft]

Thank you, I'm managing through writing.

[Hebe]

Very heart-rendering poem, well expressed and you have a way to make it personal. So much loss my heart goes out to you.

[Lovecraft]

Thanks, but this poem is not based on ANY personal experience. Strange, I know.

[Hebe]

Even better.... that's the feeling you created ..captures the audience! :)

[Lovecraft]

Thank you! I guess watching so much TV and films has really paid off, lol.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

This is very well-written indeed.. While you may not have felt exactly what you wrote, still you pieced it up nicely, weaving a an effect of pain the readers can only too well relate to..
Writing without feeling is an art too in my opinion which you are brimming with.. Nicely penned!

[Lovecraft]

Thank you. Still surprised at how effectively I must have written this.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You are welcome! It is a surprise yes, that our most unfeelingly written pieces are the most effective.. I can truly understand that feeling ☺👍

[M. L. F.]

Wow.... This one is good. The emotions are so big. I don't know why you doubt yourself here, silly really... In my opinion one of the best of yours I have yet read Lovecraft... If Claire is real send this to her... I'm nosy but yeah... I'm also an eternal optimist, funny considering the darkness of a lot of my work. But I always see the light at the end... and maybe she will too Lovecraft... The loss of sons... Aye. All I will say about that... Aye..

Anyway, great work... Really..
..Misty

[Lovecraft]

Thanks. Never been married and I don't have kids.

[M. L. F.]

Even more skill then for you to have pulled this one off without having felt said pains.... Kudos..

[Lovecraft]

Strangely enough, I wrote this a few days before my brother passed away. It's weird.

[M. L. F.]

I have those experience all the time. Symbols, signs, yes, sometimes things are weird, but sometimes we just sense things.. That is interesting. I am sorry for the loss of your brother Lovecraft..