Peculiar Feeling

Peculiar Feeling

A Poem by Ethale Captor
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Why must this haunt me...?

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Something's out of place..
Something is just not right..
Dread wrapped in satin lace,
Or fades in the light?

I don't see the flaw
Or a mistake that I made.
Perhaps a final draw?
My last card I've laid?

Peculiar sense,
Why do you haunt my view?
Why do you make me tense?
What'd I do to you?

My stomach is sick,
I cannot go to sleep.
What has made my mind tick?
Should I my thoughts keep?

A sense of relief
And awful dread in one.
Oh, Peculiar feeling..
Just what have you done..?

© 2013 Ethale Captor


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I love how you personified your inner mind in this. It shows the battle between the subconscious and the conscious slowly coming to view. A chilling reality that we dont have all the answers even about ourselves. A cold questioning piece. Great job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Ethale Captor

8 Years Ago

Thank you.
chilling...purely chilling

Posted 8 Years Ago


Ethale Captor

8 Years Ago

Easy going, yet chilling, was my intent. Thank you.
marie

8 Years Ago

no problem,you achieved it with ease
Feels like a lurking fear under every move that the last moment was a misstep on a minefield.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ethale Captor

8 Years Ago

Thanks, that is what I was thinking when I wrote it.
I have to agree with RachelReaper "dread wrappedi n satin lace" is a perfect line. This poem reminds me of feeling completely stuck in love with someone I necessarily shouldn't be. It resonated with me for so many reasons. I really enjoyed it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Ethale Captor

8 Years Ago

Thank you.
this has a very haunting and unsettling feel to it, which I'm sure is what you were going for, so great work! "Dread wrapped in satin lace" was my favorite line.

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Ethale Captor

8 Years Ago

Thanks.

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Ethale Captor
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