Wasting Away

May trigger emotions for some people. It did for me.

Imagine your mental state as a projection of yourself.

Do you think you're wasting away?

Can you see the anguished scars of memories,

painted across your body like a mural of twisted decisions?

Does it make you sick to see the pain you've felt?

That which you have kept buried in the crypt of self deprecation

you call your heart?

I want you to step forward, 

cross the line you once drew.

The line you swore to always uphold until the day of your sweet death.

Embrace yourself.

I want you to hold yourself the way that you wish you were being held when you felt that pain.

You may feel alone sometimes,

but always know that failing support from anyone else.

The greatest support can be yourself.

Reviews

[Bee C.]

This is incredibly strong and I can tell that it's heartfelt and passionate. I won't lie - I really needed this. For the only person who has stuck around with you through all of it is yourself. You are the person who dragged your body out of bed, who fed you when you didn't want to eat, who held you when you were crying. Truly, truly beautiful message.
One thing, and one thing only. You may want to look again at the punctuation in the final stanza, as the sentence feels incomplete. Perhaps replace the period with a comma, and make "failing support from anyone else" a separate clause. Other than that, fantastic job!

[Ryan Henderson]

This is wonderful, BlankCypher! I love this poem, I love deep, meaningful poems that come from the heart, this poem was so nice, I can completely relate to this piece, which strengthened my understanding of it all the more. Very good writing, keep it up!

[BlankCypher]

Thanks man, it's the kind of thing that just comes straight from life you know? :)

[Ryan Henderson]

Yeah, great work!

[Duckey]

This is a beautiful poem. The imagery in this is wonderful, and the way it is written is really to make the reader think, which is one of my favorite things about it! Another awesome one. Well done.

[BlankCypher]

Thank you so much! :D

[Awfulhabits]

Wow, This is amazing work. It was so strong!

[BlankCypher]

Thank you! I put a lot of effort and feeling into this one!

[Laura Lynn]

BlankCypher, How does the addressed of the poem "Cross the line [he or she/they/ we/or I] once drew?

I see that in the Irish tongue I see that 'do chorp' means 'your body' an interesting spelling 'do' means you and chorp like body/core/corps. I have to be very selecting w/ my words of translation because today I am trying to study Danish (Danes: 'handske(n)' means 'glove'; 'dyreven' means' animal lover'

I would like to call up our Irish words for heart, very strange to understand how the translation informs this:

croí........................heart, body, fulcrum, life
ceirtlín....................head, heart
misneach..................bottle, heart, hope, morale, pluck, strength
uchtach...................heart, pluck, strength
hart........................heart

This is where it brings me, How does the addressed of the poem "Cross the line [x] once drew?

[Arnav swaminathan]

The story of many :-)nicely done.a simple one unlike your previous works.