Before the Party

I only wrote this for a school assignment... if you've grown familiar with my writing you'd know that this isn't my aura, lol. http://www.poetrysoup.com/poems_poets/poem_detail.aspx?ID=468235

                     Her mind is like an upbeat child who sees delicious cakes;
                  Her mind is like a lukewarm breeze that passes with no breaks
                   Her mind is like a whoosh of chaos rising from the sea;
                  Her mind is shouting over everything, because she’s a bride to be.

 
              Bring her a bowl of cream with fruit piled on the side;
             Make her laugh and let her ponder the thought of who’s waiting inside;
           Then oh so swiftly tuck her slim frame into the cloth that you weaved;
            Because she’s about to enter the party, where she's a bride to be.
             

Author's Note

Honest commentary always welcome.

Reviews

[Saddam]

Bring her a bowl of cream with fruit piled on the side;
Make her laugh and let her ponder the thought of who’s waiting inside;
well crafted dear....absolutely fine with pen. I am happy and where she's a bride to be.

[Angel Criner]

Aweee much appreciated and I'm glad.

[Saddam]

you're welcome dear.

[marcusami]

very well written. it makes me feel like wow this lady is really in love. it reminded me of the avett brothers song january wedding

[Angel Criner]

That's lovely... I might see what that song's about later, lol. Appreciated.

[Cassie]

Nothing as sweet as being a bride after the hustles of planning for a wedding, you have brought out that feeling really well.

[Angel Criner]

Much appreciated... Lol, one day I'll get to experience this and hopefully only once.