Death Be Kind

Death Be Kind

A Poem by Madelyn Defray
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A letter so Death asking him to take her life instead of her taking it herself.

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Death be kind, Death be gentle

 

Please come for me, let my life unwind

But for heaven sakes please be on time

I have been waiting so long to find your waiting hand

To follow you through the path of shadows and find the promised land

 

Death be kind, Death be gentle

 

My deranged mind seeks salvation

My broken heart wishes for reconsoliation

I fear the beast that resides in my soul

He rips and tears and claws a hole

 

Death be kind, Death be gentle

 

The voices scream, bark and chatter

Mocking me with their bitter laughter

She has given up they say, a coward- a child

I will leave I say in a little while

 

But Death be kind, and please be gentle

 

Take me now, instead of after

 

 

© 2012 Madelyn Defray


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It's interesting. Death comes when it wants. You can fight Death, embrace him, or simply leave him alone. All you can hope for is for your death not to hurt.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Who hasnt heard the darkness calling them. To feel defeated by life and powerless to turn it around. Yet not wanting to truly commit to surrender. Dark and haunting topic. Well written.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Really like it. There can be a lot of irony here and I like that. She could get exactly what she wants, or she could live to 100, or she is waiting so long she ends up taking her own life and it is horrible and brutal. Good job

Posted 8 Years Ago


A interesting poem. Death is the great mystery. When he desire to come. Hard to stop. I like the desire of this poem.
"But Death be kind, and please be gentle"
Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


Amazingly awesome!!!
100/100

Posted 8 Years Ago


Sweetness my experiences with death were far from kind and gentle. I like "the beast that resides in my soul" line. Reminds of a line I wrote somewhere "beast on a leash" but that context had to do with sex. I did enjoy reading your poem and I've an insight that may well be worthless but what the f**k, right? People who romanticize death are likely to have never had to deal with it and trust me, it's not kind or gentle, it's very final.I told you it would be a worthless insight cause it's f**k all to do with your poem. I'm just funny like that. Thanx...

Posted 8 Years Ago


Madelyn Defray

8 Years Ago

No I like that you offered insight. I know death is far from gentle and kind- you're right it's noth.. read more
I feel that the choruses between the stanzas should have two lines, the second pertaining to the upcoming stanza. The one at the beginning was perfect (in my opinion) because it was leading into the topic of the poem. But for example:
"Death be kind, Death be Gentle.
Death be known I'm going mental.

My deranged mind seeks salvation..."
Because (to me) that stanza talks about all the things that are running through her mind. Her fears and her worries and her personal findings about her self. It's Not the fact that she's going crazy as some would read that and think.

"Death be kind, Death be Gentle.
Silence them, up on the mantle.

The voices scream, bark and chatter..."
Here talking about "them, up on the mantle" as in her peers looking down on her. Judging her. The "silence" pertaining to her telling them she's leaving.

I'm not trying to rewrite you work. It is in point of fact very lovely. I just think that for the flow of the poem that adding a second line to those two choruses would help. But if that is how you wrote it then that's how you wrote it. I know how that is. I hated it when my English teachers would tell me I was missing something or it actually "wasn't finished" and it was because that's how I wrote it. But like I said that's just my opinion. Otherwise, this is indeed an awesome poem! Keep it up!

Posted 8 Years Ago


I don't truly believe this to be an aspect of suicide but rather a fear of taking ones own life. Death be kind, death be gentle does not sound like a suicidal thought but rather a disdain for the act. It's common for everyone to have that "giving up" feeling but very few can be honest that it isn't easy. Courage is only truly found when you are on the edge of the building...though I have a lot of pity for many who suffer from this urge, it seems that you know that to commit such an act, no matter the reason, is difficult. Nice poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Madelyn Defray

8 Years Ago

My point exactly. She's pretty much asking for death to come and do it for her because she can't bri.. read more
I find this very disturbing but elegant at the same time. I like the way the words flow together! Overall, I really like it!

Posted 8 Years Ago


This sounds like a suicidal thought...I like the repetition and vocab. Great job :)

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Tags: Dark, Death, Closure, Loss, Depression

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Madelyn Defray
Madelyn Defray

Narnia, The Wardrobe, Canada



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