Knowing is Half the Battle

 

I closed my eyes and

Watched the shadows eat you alive.

The lyrics in your back pocket won’t pull you to safety…

And in the eyes of the shadows,

I saw your lust, your past, your complete foundation.

I’ve seen uncertainty in your gestures,

Doubt in your smiles.

In your kisses I’ve felt the shadow’s acidic sting,

And my base can’t combat it anymore.

My light can’t shine as far as you’re falling.

 

I closed my eyes and

Watched the shadows eat you alive.

And in my peaceful moments before sleep held me close,

You held me closer, and

Then the shadows robbed my heart.

 

Those shadows will not spit you back up

For me to mold again.

Mold yourself, my love, around you.

 

And when I opened my eyes and

Saw you there,

I knew you were lost.

 

 

Reviews

[DrumMajorPod]

Knowing is half the battle.. true indeed. I love the line "My light can't shine as far as you're falling." That was such an insightful, brutally honest line. It shows how.. no matter how much you want to help someone, they must also want to help themselves. I also like the repetition of the word "shadows," and the various ways you convey the significance of the shadows. Excellent work. Please keep me posted on your writings.

[Wildecat]

This is brutally honest and insightful, a well crafted poem, and a pleasure to read.

[Janyce Helen Van Es]

A lot of relationships are based on uncertainty. Most of us try to hide the insecurities but the ones who really love us can see through all that. You show it in your poem here. Very emotional.

[Akasha]

Wow, thank you so muchly for the reviews. I really wasn't expecting so many so soon.
And, yes, you've read correctly into it.

Don't worry. As soon as I type up some more of my stuffs, they'll be on here.

[Isidora]

This poem is saddening to me...as though the speaker's lost his/her love to the darkness in their lover's heart, and now, though their lover's still there, it's still not the same...

I could be reading into it wrong; I admit, I'm not that great at poetry. I do love this poem, though, and the symbolism that I see. Great work.

[Jared]

Oh, how sweet. I think maybe not. I dont know I'm no good at understanding poetry. lol... But it was really good. Sounded dark so maybe it's not really that sweet. Maybe painful. I enjoyed it. U are awsome