Waving From The Waves

Waving From The Waves

A Poem by Rana
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The mind might not be invisible to what is invisible to the eye

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When the breeze greets me at the doorway

And my eyes connect to the sky

I wonder if the same touched you

Blew at your tears, made them dry

I feel a low when I think of what you miss

The world within you being more potent

But in the hours when the waves subside

And the beauty from you no longer hides

You can join me in my flight.

And I wonder how it seeps, what pores it finds,

To trickle into my heart and tickle delight,

To make me wish I were much lighter,

To fly with it on journeys boundlessly,

Smiling at faces, riding the air waves,

Swaying buds awake, planting aimless seeds,

Giving directions to an army of hovering leaves,

Treading gently and leaving no footprints,

No signs to show I had been to your place,

Except maybe my fragrance, left lingering behind

Picked from Rosemary and Marigold, yellow or mauve

High-fives to the honeybees, salutes to the eagles

A wingless flight, never tiring, endless,

Passing labyrinths, ingeniously built and

Escaping the vacuum pull wrath, leaping higher

Swirling with invisible mini-tornadoes,

A dance induced by forces beyond earthly control

When the moonlight shall initially impede vision,

Let go of fear, believe the flow, and learn navigation

So soft feels the buzz of busy humans, so far away

Lead me nearer; set me down, souvenir clasped close,

Back home, before slumber descends, fading out

Knowing dreams couldn't be even a tad more beautiful,

Than the day lived, the moments spun in the wake.



© 2019 Rana


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This is quite lovely-- it flows well, with some beautiful imagery, and has a good blend of 'heart and mind' as I believe all true poems have. Then ending is perfect--only might suggest 'descent' instead of 'descend' to avoid a bit awkward grammar [or change it to 'before slumber descends...' which might work even better].

Posted 1 Month Ago


Rana

3 Weeks Ago

It does!! Thank you Nolo! Your criterion for true poems is a good lesson and your words happily educ.. read more
I really enjoyed this, so much conveyed, so much imagery and I was pulled in tighter as I read on.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Rana

1 Month Ago

Delightful to hear! thanks :)
your write is so lovely, This is wonderful.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Rana

1 Month Ago

thanks so much!! :)
"Blew at the tears, made them dry"
oh i wish i had written that line, Rana...
your usage of words and phrasing throughout this poem is as e.e. cummings would say "puddlewonderful"
you splash the page with wonderful imagery...
very sophisticated personification and metaphor drifts through this exceptional write.
j.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Rana

2 Months Ago

I FEEL SO HAPPY! thanks Jacob :D this is a beautiful review *warm hearts*
beautiful!!! this poem made my heart smile. amazing job rana :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


Rana

2 Years Ago

Natalie thanks xoxo
Writeforlovely

2 Years Ago

Your welcome! Thank you for all your kind reviews as well. It was great to see reviews from a famili.. read more
Rana

2 Years Ago

:) Always a pleasure! Thanks Nat, and I hope the same with you!
A gorgeous write. Life does bog us down with weighty things( responsibilities, calamities, wars and deaths and so forth...) so we need to escape into a better world, a greater reality( visions, dreams, afterlife and so forth...) We need to stay centered and balanced from the extremes. We take flights of fancy, of imaginations and we go beyond the mundane and weighty. You are talented...:)..............

Posted 2 Years Ago


Rana

2 Years Ago

I love the thoughts my poem brought you "and balanced from the extremes." - exactly, Sami :) I thank.. read more
Sami Khalil

2 Years Ago

Whoa! You are welcome. ....::::)))
This was a beautiful piece of poetry. I really enjoyed your word choice it created really good imagery. I liked your high fiving the bumblebees line, it was clever and the kind of writing that sets good poems apart. Good job! :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


Rana

2 Years Ago

Oh thanks much Jaques :)
I really enjoyed this write, like the discriptiveness involved,
awesome write

Posted 2 Years Ago


Rana

2 Years Ago

Hey, thank you! :)
The engine of your poem was the wind but how you conveyed your thoughts with it really gave the reader more to think about. That's what really stuck with me from this piece - how you explained it.

"High-fives to the honeybees, salutes to the eagles
A wingless flight, never tiring, endless,
Passing labyrinths, ingeniously built and
Escaping the vacuum pull wrath, leaping higher
Swirling with invisible mini-tornadoes,
A dance induced by forces beyond earthly control" - my favorite part

You have a real talent for writing, Rana. The passion you show in all your works resonates very well with readers and I hope you continue to write!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Rana

2 Years Ago

(As a reader) I'm thinking, 'what pores it finds' -duh the nostrils. haha. the ride, it's like turni.. read more
Gaston Villanueva

2 Years Ago

Thanks for writing your own analysis! I enjoyed learning more about how your mind works!
Rana

2 Years Ago

Was fun! Ah, wow ha ha :)
I really like this. The imagery is very vivid and happy. It gave me a calm feeling. I love this line "Giving directions to an army of hovering leaves,". I personally think that was the strongest imagery. Great job, Id' like to see more of this. I feel like you have some of the best ideas for making a happy poem and story

Posted 2 Years Ago


Rana

2 Years Ago

Aw, Joey, thanks much for this lovely review! :)

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