FALLEN WOMAN

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Now they mock me

But their words

Carry no sting

For there is no shame

In being me

 

They stare,

At the swing of my hips

And long,

For the poison on my lips

So I nurse them,

Under my skirt

Then mock them,

With the shame of their lust

 

Now their mocking

Is all but gone

Said only in undertones

For the secrets of lust

Hidden under my skirt

Is a price no man

Is willing to match

 

Do not mock me

Your words

Will not sting

There is no shame

In being me

Reviews

[Angela]

Amazingly strong feel. "There is no shame in being me" Daring and daunting.

[Casper]

Love! It!

[Dream Weaver]

Wow! This is written with so much authority
I feel a thunderous I am woman hear me roar!
Nice, very nice...

[floarealbastra10]

LOVE IT

[Revolutionary]

I picture a high class stripper.On the outside of the club doors mommy type stareing at her in some sort of digusted envy as they tell their daughters not to belike her and know that their husband will be in there spending the money he should have saved for their offsprings college education.
I love this poem.it is sexy and disturbing.I like both of those things

[J.M]

Brilliant write... you really understood this character. Extraordinarily vivid and intense. You have a lot of talent - good job!

[Rossen]

When young and free and leered at by lookers on the street... mocked with unwanted lust filled stares.

Some day she soon she will not be so young, no longer the object of lusty on lookers
they will gaze at younger swinging hips, She will spend the rest of her days thinking
how she too once turned heads by the swing of her hips...maybe ..wanting..maybe.

maybe not
very good poem,well worded write

[Jim Parson]

Nicely done! I feel the fire and defiance in your words but sense an underlying tone of melancholy. Beautifully penned!

[Alvin L. Kathembe]

"Do not mock me
Your words
Will not sting
There is no shame
In being me"
whaaaaaattt!!!u have maaaad TALENT!!! this was an awesome poem...i love everything about it, and the first and last stanza are the most striking...
keep writing!!!!!!!!you definitely have me hooked, so ill keep reading. :)
"poison on my lips"? :P

[M.Babu]

POWERFUL.
you have strong imagery here- that i enjoy alot.
Fantastic piece