DANCING

DANCING

A Poem by Maureen Mwaniki
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sometimes it feels like we're here for the entertainment of some higher power

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We're dancing
We're moving our feet
And swaying our hips

Yes dancing!
Like puppets on a string
The gods choose our beat

And don't stop dancing
Oh just move your feet
Your life depends on it

Keep dancing
Or the gods will throw a fit
And you'll be dead before the next beat

We're dancing
The way the gods please
Our lives depend on it

© 2011 Maureen Mwaniki


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I like this poems smooth progression and humor.
I especially enjoyed this line
"And don't stop dancing
Oh just move your feet
Your life depends on it"
Creative!! I enjoyed this piece alot and your perspective whether we're pawns just trying to move across a board of life as gracefully as we can to appease a higher power as vigilant as a hawk was extremely amusing. SOUGHOINA (Amazing in Japanese). Flawless work

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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A very interesting poem. Dance or death? Dancing would be the way. Nice flow and ending to the excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

Posted 13 Years Ago


I like this poems smooth progression and humor.
I especially enjoyed this line
"And don't stop dancing
Oh just move your feet
Your life depends on it"
Creative!! I enjoyed this piece alot and your perspective whether we're pawns just trying to move across a board of life as gracefully as we can to appease a higher power as vigilant as a hawk was extremely amusing. SOUGHOINA (Amazing in Japanese). Flawless work

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Such a great poem! I love they way you talk about dancing! A very happy background and feeling for this poem :0
I like the beat of this poem, dancing in my head while you talk about dancing :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Good poem, very lively with an upbeat happy tone. Though on 3rd line on the 3rd stanza I believe you meant to say "Your life depends on it," rather than "You life depends on it."

Posted 13 Years Ago


As astute as ever...bt idnt think God is just some great big scary ballet trainer ready to zap at the slightest misstep...bt i love the way u put it. "your life depends on it"
you have a very striking way of writing...great work, hope we all get our choreography right ;)

Posted 13 Years Ago


As astute as ever...bt idnt think God is just some great big scary ballet trainer ready to zap at the slightest misstep...bt i love the way u put it. "your life depends on it"
you have a very striking way of writing...great work, hope we all get our choreography right ;)

Posted 13 Years Ago


I almost missed this. It sounded so upbeat,but It's almost as if you are called to court by the King. You definitely would put on your best face even if you are miserable. There are layers here, sneaky! I like this.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

like a bolt of lighting focused on foot ware DANCE OR DIE how fun

FUN like puppies on a string!


Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Maureen Mwaniki
Maureen Mwaniki

Nairobi, Kenya



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