Alone

I am alone but never lonely

In a place where I call mine

I sit all night just longing

Longing for the stars to shine

I am alone watching the fountain

Waters singing round and round

In a night full of stars shining

As my feet stays on the ground

I am alone in this starry night

In the park and no one cares

Years passed as I released a sigh

I was always alone for many years

I am alone, yes I am forgotten

This may be the way for me to grow

From the words that's making me rotten

Someday I know this feeling will go.

Reviews

[Dead Poetix]

Sorry for the delay. I like the formal nature of this - holds together nicely. But I've got some questions that might be interesting to investigate.

We start off with "I am alone but never lonely" but yet we're "longing for the stars to shine." It's almost like not lonely except for the stars, maybe?

Then the next stanza, we get a "night full of stars." So then I think, Great! We're not alone right? But sort of. Is loneliness a dichotomy? It totally can be!

Then in the last stanza, we learn that there's "words that's making me rotten," and we're "grow(ing)" away from them? So (and I could be reading this wrong) there's something said in the past that caused a change?

IN ANY case, maybe ideas addressed or could be addressed in other poems? I'm being awfully literal so please take with ample salt.

[Jenny Leigh]

Very good poem. I loved this one.

[Christian Bonoan]

Thanks for this review! I appreciate this so much

[Darian B.]

Goodness, I know exactly what you mean and I think like I can say that because you describe the feeling so well. Alone, but not lonely, yet forgotten. I feel that this kind of aloneness comes from being apart from the world, as poets we see the world in a way most cant. We pull from everything around us to the point where our emotions and logic are entirely unique. I savor the ability to watch the world but it definitely sets us apart. Well put, I love this poem!

[Christian Bonoan]

Thank you for this lovely review! I agree to what you are saying. I am glad that you loved this poem. Thanks Again :)

[Bohrium Guy]

You know normally there are but a few I will honor a read request but I admit this truely hit home. I feel the story and savored the words written as if I wrote them myself. Great write here! Keep sharing!!!

~Rob~

[Christian Bonoan]

Thanks for this review :) I appreciate this so much!

[Valentine]

Being alone for me can be very lonely. I just thank God for precious memories. Valentine

[barleygirl]

The construction of your poem is well-done, with good rhyme & rhythm, plus I very much relate to your message. I like the way each stanza uses a different natural phenomenon to show us the way it feels, full of imagery & originality. I am a loner & I've always treasured my aloneness, so it's refreshing to see this state being portrayed in a balanced way, with some longing, but not necessarily a state of being miserable in aloneness. Most of all, I like the last stanza where it explains the wisdom of staying hopeful despite feeling forgotten.

[Christian Bonoan]

Thanks for this review! I appreciate this so much!

[XO Vee]

"longing for the stars to shine" is one of my favorite lines. Thank you for sharing !

[Hebe]

Hi Christian, lovely poem, last stanza especially...you really do feel the endlessness of being alone.

[Christian Bonoan]

Hi, thanks for this review and for your kind words :)

[Neal S]

I really enjoyed the entirety of this piece Christian, but the second and third stanza are just outstanding. Thanks so much for sharing this with me.

[Christian Bonoan]

Thanks for this review Neal! I appreciate this so much!

[Neal S]

My pleasure Sir.

[D Connolly]

such a nice poem. I can see this person

[Christian Bonoan]

Thanks for this review :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree with the logic of the poem.
"I am alone, yes I am forgotten
This may be the way for me to grow
From the words that's making me rotten
Someday I know this feeling will go."
The above lines are needed. We must gather our mind and thoughts to find what we truly need. Thank you Christian for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Christian Bonoan]

Thanks for this very nice review :) I appreciate it so much :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Christian.