This Is My Prayer

This Is My Prayer

A Poem by Bluefire
"

To all my friends and family and all the amazing people I'll never forget. Nakama

"

~)~

Give them strength when they need it the most,

Give them peace, something to toast.

Give them a smile I will never see,

Fill their hearts with eternal glee.

~*~

Please filter the hate that reaches their ears,

And give them the courage to face all their fears.

Give them a song to sing through the day,
And keep the horrid demons at bay.

~*~

Give them hope when times are black,

Cast an ecouraging wind to their back.

Let laughter tickle their lips,

And fun times breach their trips.

~*~

Erase all the pain and hurt inside,

Show them the calm beyond the coming tide.

Give them shelter, be their guide,

Teach them to fly intsead of glide.

~*~

Let live all their dreams,

Weave love into their seams.

'Til their eyes twinkle like the stream,

This is the prayer that I deem.

© 2014 Bluefire


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Bluefire, this is beautiful. I'm saving this in my favorites. Keep writing. I have more space in my favorites' file. I need you to fill it up. Thank you for sharing this.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Bluefire

5 Years Ago

Thank you! I may, depends on the day.
This has beautiful flow and such a beautiful message. I just love it through and through.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Bluefire

5 Years Ago

Thank you!
LunarSong

5 Years Ago

You're welcome :)
A selfless prayer, indeed! Beyond the "give me's" and the "bless me's" should be a heart who loves others....

Posted 6 Years Ago


Bluefire

6 Years Ago

Daw, thanks! ^^
This should be the official prayer of everyone. This is from today mine. I love this and I will use it for my prayer today. This alone would do, god will understand.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Bluefire

6 Years Ago

Thank you for taking the time to read and review. ^^
I'm glad you like it!
New Theory

6 Years Ago

You are welcome :)
This poem is really good,it's so good that I am jealous of it and I just realized that I never knew what glee means until now.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Bluefire

6 Years Ago

Daw, I did something right!
Thank you muchly!
Cuuutteee profile pic by the way. ^^
I needed this today thank
you this made me smile.


I love Pinks music I have her Misunderstood
CD. perfect song to go with a Beautiful write.


My favorite Stanza's lines here.

Please filter the hate that reaches their ears,

And give them the courage to face all their fears.

Give them a song to sing through the day,
And keep the horrid demons at bay.



Blessings. kindred poet

Posted 6 Years Ago


Bluefire

6 Years Ago

=3 I'm so glad you liked it, Benita!
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!
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Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet

6 Years Ago

It's a pleasure my friend. You're very welcome. I enjoy reading your work. blessings. kindred poet
╰☆╮This made me smile (: And the song you put with it is perfect for the poem.╰☆╮

Posted 6 Years Ago


Bluefire

6 Years Ago

Yay! I made you smile! =D
Thank you muchly for readingand reviewing! ^^
"Give them a song to sing through the day,
And keep the horrid demons at bay."

"laughter tickle their lips"

"filter the hate "

"Weave love into their seams."

The above are the lines I thought you did particularly well.

Consider replacing glide with slide. In my opinion glide is not different enough from fly, or at least not as strong an opposite.

I know rhyming can be awkward, and sometimes you have to just let it be - but the dream/deem rhyme is your last impression. and "prayer that I deem" feels cut off. What about 'scream'?

As always. You are the author. I don't have the authority to tell you what to do. Just offering some possibilities.

This song brings back fun memories :)



Posted 6 Years Ago


Bluefire

6 Years Ago

You're amazing! =o
Honestly, you have picked my brain because I was thinking them things as I .. read more
I love this poem! (And the song!)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Bluefire

6 Years Ago

Thank you! Pink ish awesome x3

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