Wish I Was

Wish I was the breeze
Floating by
Gliding over land and sea
Free and easy
Seeing you there
I would kiss your face

Wish I was an Eagle
On warm golden air
An overlord of bronze
With all seeing eyes
I would swoop down
And take you to the clouds

Wish I was the ocean
With power all around
Ever fresh and surging
Forever at your shores
Trying to reach you and
Dying on your beaches

Reviews

[Saoirse K.]

to end with the ocean seemed apropos
left with waves of desire to reach the other
like the previous stanzas
each an iteration of a new wave of imaginative longing
pining in perpetuum
great imagery used throughout the piece
good write!

[Levi Levin]

Great job with this piece in contrast with nature!

[goldenscar__]

"Wish I was dreaming
and none of this is real"

[Karen Redburn]

How beautiful, a poem about love for sure, but also I sense protection. Wanting to care for someone/ something. Excellent imagery, soft, gentle and natural. Fantastic!

[Gladys]

I really liked the flow of your poem; it had a soft, breezy feel that matched the theme that you were portraying. The imagery was also fantastic. I normally prefer rhyming poetry, but I think the lack of rhyme actually made this poem better!

[Valentine]

I wish, I often wonder just how many times a person says or thinks this in a lifetime. Valentine

[Ewen A Morrison]

I wish I'd seen your poetry, before this first encounter - I'm certain it won't be the last encounter - thank you!

[Gee]

I wish I was something I'm not to capture that which I value most. I think all of us have felt this way at times in our lives. Very well written

[Laleetwin]

Be, you have created a visual, tangible representation of one human's longing for another. I love it's melancholy beauty.