Apple Orchard

Apple Orchard

A Story by BL

300 words

I was forever the cautious man, but when you came along I risked it all. I put all my possessions on the line on one haphazard and unlikely throw of the dice. In my haze of spellbound madness I lost everything and all I was left with was you yourself, it seemed like a fair exchange, but then you left and I had nothing at all.

I was left out in the cold with only a cardigan coat to wear and it snowed hard that winter as I slept in doorways. On the streets I dreamed of you and what I once had, I dreamed of a life that might have been. As I looked back I remember thinking it would be unimaginable to make any other decision and I would have done exactly the same thing all over again and lost it all again.

When all seemed lost, my run at everything over and the lights of heaven gently approached, at the last someone took me in. A reassuring figure was there to brush away the snow. Someone who was kind, they gave me warmth and food and set me on my way. In that house of kindness, my staging post, through dirty bath water I began to see visions of the future.

Time passed, the summer broke and I found a new place to be. Someone said they saw me in the orchard, on the rope swing without a care in the world, but I can't say it's true. Although I can't deny the taste of apples that were so sweet and pure. Someone said they saw me talking to Lily Mae, whispering in her ear, telling her a pile of lies, but I can't say I remember. I do remember her tender kiss though. I had recovered.

© 2015 BL

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Your heart speaks loud in this poem. It is sad though. I can only imagine the loss you experienced.
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Posted 6 Months Ago

Very good! How appropriate with all we see about the homeless huddled in doorways!

Posted 2 Years Ago

I really enjoyed this. The redemption arc is calming, and I am left with contentment.

You might consider revisiting your use of punctuation. There's several spots in here that would be fantastically improved with punctuation editing, and even a semi-colon or two.

Thank you for writing this. I like it a lot.

Posted 2 Years Ago

Very strong and effective writing. How we may change after weathering a storm.

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 Years Ago

Yes indeed, thanks for you comment
Wowww... I have never been a fan of the short stories.I am lazy to read them. But this one just caught me unawares. I don't know how, I don't why but i liked it. Count me as a fan:)

Posted 5 Years Ago


5 Years Ago

Thanks very much, appreciated
This short story reads like poetry. Your expressions are graceful & your story unfolds with a sense of wonder. Even tho the storyline is a bit sad, there's a note of strength thru-out, & in the end, we see the narrator feeling healed from this heartbreak. I like the straightforward way you show us how the narrator is feeling, realistic specific details bring the homeless scene to life. I like that this could be literal or figurative. We can feel homeless, as described here, even when our lives are intact with a roof over our heads, etc. I like that this message is multi-layered. Good job!

Posted 5 Years Ago


5 Years Ago

I'm glad you like it, I dont write many short pieces like this and they are a bit different to do. I.. read more
I really like this, deceptively rich and deep for a short story, covers a range of feelings and emotions in just a couple of paragraphs.

Posted 5 Years Ago

This is pretty good. Brief and to the point but powerful at that and succinctly lovely.

Posted 5 Years Ago

Liked your story, coming back from loss's and tough times,many of us can relate. From homeless in the cold winter to sunshine,sweet apples and kissing country girls almost makes the pain worth it. Richie B.

Posted 5 Years Ago

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Added on December 2, 2015
Last Updated on December 4, 2015



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