Our Tempest

Dancing in the rain! Exhilarating and oh, so cold!

I feel it.
Humming, in my bones
pounding on my lungs
I watch it,
dancing on my skin
tugging on my clothes

CRASH! RUMBLE!
Come dance with me!

You feel it.
Shaking, in your bones
thumping in your lungs
You watch it,
prancing on your skin,
Whipping through your clothes

BOOM! ROAR!
Come sing with me!

We love it.
drenching us in ice
Prompting us to grin
It's in us,
flashing in the sky
thundering aloft

CRASH! RUMBLE!
Come laugh with me!
BOOM! ROAR!
Love this storm with me!

Author's Note

I absolutely love dancing in thunderstorms and will make anyone with me join me! Your heart is racing and the sky is flashing and the world is shaking and there's nothing else quite like it!

Reviews

[AliciaB]

This is a wonderful poem. Beautiful imagery throughout, especially with the personification of that electric energy of a thunderstorm. I almost got the feeling of being out there dancing with you while reading this! :) Your word choice is excellent in conveying your feelings regarding this experience. Very nicely done!

[Blysful]

I'm so happy that it invoked the urge to dance! I can never quite convince people to get up and celebrate the thunder with me when I speak, so it's good to know that the words are there, I jut need to get better at using them! :) Then again, maybe the lightning does put most people off ... :p

[AliciaB]

Yeah... I love dancing (though I'm terrible at it), but I'd prefer not to get electrocuted. :)

[Blysful]

Boring, the lot of ya! :p electrocution never did me any harm 😆

[Érenn]

Ok sorry I didn't stop by yesterday to give this a read, but thank god, I did today ^^ This is amazing, at first I was almost deceived into believing that this was a script on a chaotic love, fortunately the onomatopoeia helped me understand your love for this storm and how your love for it could even end up dragging somebody else into it ^^ The flow is lovely throughout the write, and the pace felt just right. Thank you for sharing ^^

[Blysful]

Perhaps I should change the description so that it's open for interpretation - so many people are interpreting it in different ways, who am I to say they're wrong? :p thanks so much for the review, it was lovely to read :)

[Aehr]

At first I thought this was a metaphorical poem about two people trying to let go of their disastrous pasts and falling in chaotic love with each other. But I read your description and it took me to a completely different place. I love, love the way this poem flows, I love the feeling of urgency, the fleeting thunderous rhythm. Very exciting and very well portrayed. Keep writing. X

[Blysful]

I'm so glad you like it ^.^ if you thought this was exciting I urge you to try going out in a thunderstorm yourself! Thank you for your kind words :)

[Aehr]

I certainly will. I have new reason to do so now. :) x

[barleygirl]

This is very expressive, especially with the abundant & well-placed onomatopoeia (words that sound like what they're describing -- BOOM! ROAR! CRASH! RUMBLE!) Most of all, the enthusiasm is rampant & enticing. Your poem could persuade someone to join you, dancing in the rain, despite cold & putting reluctance aside. Your message is described in very fresh & unusual ways. Like no description of rain & storms I've ever read. This is a fun bit of persuasive poetry.

[Blysful]

Haha thanks! I find being out in a storm absolutely wonderful and I'm glad you felt it was fun :)