Meaningless

Okay,go easy on me people this is my second attept at poetry so keep your critasism dials on low :P

So you mean to tell me it was meaningless?

The moments we shared that rendered you speechless.

I thought we were in love.

Thought I made your heart soar like a dove.

 

Broken I realized the message behind it all.

As if it were clearly written on the wall.

Our love was meant to show me someone true.

Not someone dark and blue.

 

You left me without warning.

Sending me into depression every morning.

After days of pain.

I realized to you, it was just a game

 

I talked to someone dear days after.

She filled my heart with laughter.

Not despair and worry.

Like you did, to make my path seem blurry.

 

Fear jolted up my spine.

As I wondered if it was fine.

To like her after being with you.

But then the word popped in my head, We’re through.

 

For days it was strange.

Knowing she was within my hearts range.

So finally I decided not to pout

And chose to ask her out.

 

And as I look back to our past

I realize we would have never last.

I do not regret our relationship at all.

But it take more than you to make me fall.

Author's Note

Might be some bad rhymes and what-not in there,its my second attempt so be gentle! :O

Reviews

[InkSlinger]

Okay, dialed back my critique meter to low.. actually, it wasn't half bad.. you got your point across without confusing the points you were trying to make.. We all find a place to start.. most of us write about the pain we feel after a break-up, or mistreatment that we survived.. you are well on the way to becoming an effective writer..