A Fire Started

A Fire Started

A Poem by Bra.Kofi
"

do not give too much credit to others for your feelings; you are the master of them.

"
you started a fire
a hot flame that burned my heart
eliminated my troubles in and out
with a mind of searing conflicts
and a quest to your forfeit
an unquelled flame of desire
letting me frail and wearily dire
I kept your ways and did adhere


you started a fire
surviving without you
I died
learning the rhythm of life 
many days a time
w'out you with me I cried
but the pain left me with time
now I do not grieve nor whine
'cos you had no fire but mine

© 2016 Bra.Kofi


My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Reviews

Wow you can feel the power of words as you read them. Or maybe its the flames?
The poem hooked me and I really enjoyed it.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Bra.Kofi

6 Years Ago

thank you Diane
i appreciate it
i feel the passion of this piece, the way you write is wonderful.i like your style.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Bra.Kofi

7 Years Ago

thank you Raven
This is a great poem that makes you kind of believe that the other made the flame, but then it turns and you say. No, those were my feelings that I created, not yours. If you ever get a chance please check out my writing. Thanks!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bra.Kofi

7 Years Ago

thank you for your review and i will check yours asap
Hello Bra

This is a wonderful poem. I enjoyed the use of language and the deep passion, the pure dedication in your love. Unrequited it may be but the purity of devotion is a beautiful thing. I enjoy your style and am looking forward to more of your writing.
A few editing suggestions Second to last verse I felt that grieve might fit better than grief, also "i died" use a capital for I.
Blessings
El :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Bra.Kofi

7 Years Ago

thank you very much Elmarie for your review. your corrections are noted and deeply appreciated.
Elmarie

7 Years Ago

You are so welcome :) El

Share This
Email
Facebook
Twitter
Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

361 Views
4 Reviews
Rating
Added on June 30, 2016
Last Updated on July 7, 2016
Tags: Love, African, Ghana, Relationship

Author

Bra.Kofi
Bra.Kofi

Writing
I am Man I am Man

A Poem by Bra.Kofi


FRIENDS FRIENDS

A Story by Bra.Kofi