I can't win...

Thoughts in from the perspective of an anti hero of mine... just an idea I'm toying with.

Sirens everywhere...
The ground is rocked by another explosion
People run aimlessly, screaming...
Screaming
At the mercy of the merciless
There is nowhere to hide
As building after building tumbles in flames
The comets fly from the b*****d's hands
Rolling the sky with terrible fire
The children of the earth weep
tears their only shield
but not against that smile
He's drunk in the madness
He has an answer to his pain
And the pain of us all
and it lies within the fire
within the furnace
And with that terrible grin
There will only be ash

I can't win this fight
Should I even try?
How could I stop him?
Where do I even begin?
He is faster by far...
How can I stay his Thunder
When his hands are like lightning?
The people crawl like wild animals
The strength has gone out from their legs
They cry out as if in the pains of labor
They will parish
For they cannot bare this fire
They cannot withstand this fury

But I can
I can withstand those terrible flames
And I have felt this fury before
He rises in the sky
Poised like a Lion
Eyes as sharp as any predator
I will take his rage
The lion will maul the bear
Giving the little ones time to escape

I can't win this fight
But I won't let him win either...

Author's Note

a new experiment in a story/poem... if it's liked, I'll do more... hope you enjoy!

Reviews

[JayceeC]

I stayed wrapped in this story throughout the write. I like the free flowing form and the amount of tension you keep with the tight lines. overall a very interesting read, even if we don't know who the anti-hero is..but how anti are the actions of one willing to sacrifice for others? That seems like the only requirement needed to be a hero.
jan

[Joshua Clement]

I agree, many people wouldn't see the "anti" because they don't know the character, and I can reveal his entirety on a single page... it was just a scene that I was playing with in my head from a story... thank you so much for your feedback!

[Thesecuts]

Wow this is just so deep.

[cloakedone]

well josh it was definitely interesting commend you.

~cloaked one

[Rana]

A nice little fast-paced free verse. It's inspiring. Through the eyes of the protagonist we see the misery and sense urgency of action and through his heart we feel his bravery. Certainly enjoyed it.

[Joshua Clement]

Thank you so much!

[AaronFreitas]

I definitely like it Joshua... want more!

[Joshua Clement]

More? Meh... Sure... why not?

[613]

"Eye's as sharp as any predator" - should say "Eyes" instead.

This was written very well. Nice job!

- Brittney

[Joshua Clement]

Thank you... I fixed it..... thank you so much for reviewing!

[613]

You're welcome! I look forward to reading more from you! (:

[Jamestown]

Well written and delivered!
I really enjoyed this piece and I like the message at the end, priceless!
I can't win this fight, but I won't let him win either:)
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Joshua Clement]

Thank you sir... I'm very happy you enjoyed it! You be Blessed too!