Collapsed Armor

This describes the wall, the armor of the city and castle, is being seiged and falling apart.

Collapsed Armor

By Victor Hagenbucher

The air began to grow dense with despair,

As the thunder of many feet became clear,

The wall stood there in defiance of what was to come,

But can the stone block out such a force?

Does it have the strength to keep invaders out?

 

For many years it has protected us,

No force has ever penetrated it,

But today it sounded creaky with age,

Sort of like it knew of the force to hit it,

It will fall and crumble with the new air,

 

Prophets everywhere have predicted the fall,

Believing that the star’s alignment proved it so,

No force has battled us in a hundred years,

Where the valor of heroes shined brightest,

We are in desperate need of that greatness again,

 

The muscles of our archers tensed,

With sweat gleaming across their faces,

Their expressions showing a sense of anxiety and dread,

Not wanting to witness any of the coming horror,

Yet they stood at their posts to show their unbreakable pride,

 

Our warriors love their land with a burning fierceness,

And will give their sword and blood to ensure its safety,

Against any evil foe that seeks to destroy it,

They will prove to be their era’s legendary heroes,

And believe their sacrifice is the greatest honor,

 

The battle cry’s can be heard clearly now,

As the piercing rain began to pour,

Catapults are heard as stone begins to disintegrate,

Dark warriors charge through the catastrophic gaps,

As the battle of the ages takes its gruesome beginning.

 

Author's Note

Let me know your overall review of this piece, It took me a good while to get it visualized perfectly!!
Let me know your opinion about the imagery within this piece. I also entered this poem in the Aspiring Author's contest in my city!

Reviews

[Red Brick Keshner]

The universality offered by the images of this poem proves itself when in the first three stanzas I had an intense image of the twin towers mirroring that of the city and castle of the poem. Lots of potential in this poem and maybe some might say that it could be lengthened by several more stanzas.

[PurpleQuartz]

The imagery is really great!!! It's almost as if Its all happening right in front of me!

[Jazzy McFlatchest]

This poem strikes up a very solid picture and I love your choice of words. Very nicely done.

[TL Boehm]

this reads like part of a larger story...very old world, very "Bard" inspired. I found it rich, interesting and wanted to read more. Well done.

[An owl on the moon]

Powerfully vivid, the visually nature of the coming disaster is an awesome sight. Here you capture a sense of the end of an age and the end of all that is left in disrepair... Amazing write!