A Poem by Brittany W

She promises herself she won’t do to her children what shes done to her,

She promises she won’t rip her children’s heart out.

She watches, and promises she won’t make the same mistakes.

She knows what it feels like

To watch and have no way of stopping,

She knows what it feels like to have that ache in her heart

That numbing pain

The ripping and tearing,

The feeling of loneliness.


I know what it’s like to be scared,

I know what it feels like to have that pain in my heart

That very same consistant numbing pain,

The same anguish

and the ripping and tearing

I have the recurring fear that this will happen to them,

That they’ll experience the same s**t,

First hand



I dont want that
I’m scared for them.

© 2010 Brittany W

Author's Note

Brittany W
Im not sure on my writing anymore, but enjoy.

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This piece is very deep, and it hit me hard. I know exactly how these feelings feel, as I have had the same feelings. Good Job

Posted 10 Years Ago

Please don't doubt yourself, this is a very deep and creative piece. Keep 'em comming!

Posted 10 Years Ago

what a greatly written poem! the depth is amazing and I love how you laid it out! nice job!

Posted 10 Years Ago

there is so much debth in this poem, tragic yet strangely hopeful, it gives the real impression of a point in time before and after endured tragedy , excellent

Posted 10 Years Ago

Tragic experiences can create lifetime of emotional turmoil until fear becomes the best friend. I like this, it really captures the darkness one might embrace.

Posted 10 Years Ago

This was VERY good.
Keep up the great work

Posted 10 Years Ago

This was lovely mate...
and very touching...

Posted 10 Years Ago

i like it maybe you can make it better by not using I'm, Don't. instead use the full words like I am or Do not.. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago

What a glimpse of a world of pain and fear.. and the seemingly impossible journey to escape it.. Yet, true, too often it flows through us like a river, and the fear continues.. Powerful write.

Posted 10 Years Ago

Why are you not sure? You have a great way of expressing the perspective and emotion of being both in and outside of the narration. Your writing displays a 360 degree range. This is a good reflection moment captured with clarity and directness.
Each moment you capture and craft starts pointing in directions that may not be initially apparent. That's why we have to keep writing through the unsure times. It's all there. The words, what we want to say, it just needs our attention. Don't sweat it, keep writing.

Posted 10 Years Ago

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Added on October 26, 2010
Last Updated on October 26, 2010


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