Wails Of Addiction

Addiction succumbs so many.

                Wails Of Addiction
                               
                                The Erie sounds around me tugging at my name,
                                ripping , clawing , tearing , causing lasting pain.
                                Cravings unquenchable, guilt, remorse, and shame.
                                Erie sounds around me pleading at my name.

                                All the mirrors covered, house is kept in dark.
                                death drives a caddie, and in my soul it parks.
                                Drowning by the minute, gasping for some air,
                                crawling, scratching, screaming, why should i care.
                                Erie sounds around me coughing up my name.

                               Knocking at my door, shhhhhhh be silent.
                               convulsing stomach walls, often very violent.
                               Voices outside my window, voices on the roof,
                               and to these crazy voices i wish there was a mute.
                               I pray for God to save me, and free me from this pain.
                               Erie sounds come from me, SCREAMING OUT HIS NAME !

Reviews

[Dark Beauty]

Excellent write with wonderful words of imagery for me, I can relate to this and you nailed it-great write!!

[Enigma]

Raw horror pulsating with a strong macabre theme. The imagery was brilliant and the rhymes fit and flow very well. The structure is equally impressive with the last line of every verse, being repeated to enhance the over all effect.

In short, splendid write. Keep it up. :)

[Larry Dyson]

very versatile writing abilities and a cute choice of subjects....dont know your age but if It matters you are very talented...IMHO...novel approach to your poetry and the forms are different...I like it ...write some prose ever ?..or stories? what do you read?..read one of mine please? ECM/Laury

[Lily Mae]

This is extremely intense. An addiction of the heart, mind, body and soul..x

[Becky C Strukamp]

I loved this poem. You penned beautifully. The flow was spot on. Your word choosing nailed it. Excellent!

[Zeek4]

I've never been addicted in the classic sense of the word, but your poem seems like an accurate portrayal of what it must be like. Not one to read before bed.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Very evocative and is haunting in a way that I adore :)

[dead man talking]

scary poem ,ecellent