The Pianist

His fingers glide over the keys. His face is calm as he carefully listens to the instruments fine tune. The notes on the white paper become reality. It fills the air with a different feeling to every heart. The pace speeds up, his fingers move rapidly and yet, even more graceful. His heart combines with the tune and races along with the pace. The notes begin to playfully bounce off the paper. The fingers slow and delicately press each key. His heart is light, his fingers stop, he stands up and leaves his bench without a bow. Yet, it still lingers throughout the room, in every heart.

Author's Note

I wrote this a long time ago but I haven't posted it. My brother is an amazing, self-taught pianist. He can play anything and he is definitely the one who inspired me to write this.

Reviews

[Sara]

There is no possible way for me to pick out any particular sentence that I adore the most because each sentence is beautifully worded. Your imagery is fabulous. So fabulous that I can actually imagine someone in the room with me playing a beautiful melody.

[de-oblitus]

Pianist amaze me simply for everything you wrote here. They are inspirational in so many ways.

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Perfection. Love and music playing off each other.

[TheElfPrincess]

A very nice story, I am glad you posted it. Well written.

[Ripple of Aqua]

"His heart combines with the tune and races along with the pace." Best part over it all. I could totally see your brother there with his piano, completely entranced at what he was playing. Wonderful.

[ablelaz]

Hi BrynnaW. --- I’m going to swim against the currant I on this piece. Oh don’t misunderstand me, I think you are a very good writer, but this could be theses, paper, review, but it is not a story. There are too many elements of a story missing: A start, a body and a finish. If you wrote this as a review of a pianist work it would rate very well, but a story not in my opinion.
If you’re trying to write a piece of praise about you brother, by all means introduce him and let him live the experience. In this example you are just telling us and it comes across as flat. That how this old puppies take on it anyway.

Talk to you soon ---ablelaz.

[Tasha]

This was amazing. I'm sure your brother is proud of this and you. Keep on penning. Excellent job.

This is good! Reminds me of when my siblings play piano too- slouching but playing the most incredible music, and it flows beautifully. Every bit as vivid as The Writer :).

[FantasyWriter01]

Nice job. Short and yet, so powerful and well described. Lovely word usage and very emotional, powerful, short and sweet. Keep up the nice work.
FantasyWriter01

Wow. I like this one, it's short, but very sweet.

From beginning to end, the words and imagery flow nicely. I like how you personified the notes. This seems like poetry to me. Keep it up!