Tumble

     I tumble uncontrollably and struggle for air. My head tries to find the surface before I am swept off my feet again. Sand cuts up my legs and another wave crashes on top of me. I tumble, twist, and turn to no avail. I am confused as to which is up and which is down. My body begins to hiccup as I suck in salt water, my eyes seem to bulge, and my head pulses. I think of my family and wonder how they would react if I died. Moments and memories played before my hazy vision. My body felt light and tired but, finally, I found relief as I found the surface. I spat out water and coughed. I shook and tried to focus my blurry vision. The danger of drowning was over but that was enough ocean for me in one day.

Author's Note

Actually, a true story.... One of my many scary true stories. I have another scary true story about me in the ocean... I am only here because my brother saved me. (No I was not drowning when my brother saved me... I know how to swim!!) This is the only one I will post because it was easier to describe. Hope you liked it!

Reviews

[Aaron M. Anderson]

This is a wonderful description of a horrible event! I'm sorry to hear it really happened. It's a very realistic retelling, and I appreciate the part in which you wonder what your family would think. As I read, I can't help but feel I'm there. Good work!

[Uc Amalu Jr]

Brynna, it's seems you're not a good candidate for fear factor :-) . . It's a good story. . Would like to read another

[Christine McNead]

good writing for a short story, loved the descriptions. If you made a book I'm sure I'd love it- good description is key!

[Daytonight]

How very terrifying for you! So glad you are okay. Keep on penning.

[TheElfPrincess]

It's scary that it's true. It's a really good, descriptive story and I liked it very much. Well done.

[Blessed_Angel]

wow this has amazing description in it.. i love it great job.. :)

[Hunter C. Brown]

wow my heart is pumping. great job!!!