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A possible book idea...

     A man sat in a waiting room and twiddled his thumbs. He didn't know if he could trust the people inside the surgical room. They seemed eager for his daughter and they didn't really seem like professionals. Something just seemed... wrong. Still, he waited for news of his daughter. The man shook his legs, chewed the inside of cheek, and nodded his head repeatedly as if he was in the middle of a song. The door in front of him swung open to reveal a man dressed in blue.

     "Mr. Sanders?" He looked around the room.

     "Right here and I am the only one in here. How's my daughter?" Mr. Sanders asked.

     "Fine. The cancer is all gone."

     "Seriously? Can I take her home or does she need to stay in the hospital for a couple days? Can I see her?"

     "Sir, I am sorry but there appears to be a misunderstanding." The man held out a gun, "We don't need you. We just need your daughter and yes, I suppose she needs to stay in the hospital."

     "What do you mean? I thought we had an agreement! I pay you money and you get rid of her cancer!"

     "No, there was our disagreement."

     "Let me just see my daughter, please..." Mr. Sanders pleaded.

     "Fine... You can see her." the man smiled menacingly as he led Mr. Sanders down a long hallway and into a room. His daughter was sleeping in one of the beds and Mr. Sanders sat down in the chair next to her with several cautious glances at the man's gun. Mr. Sanders shook his daughter but she didn't open her eyes. He shook her again but more violently. 

     The girl's hand came up and gripped his throat. Her grip was stronger than a man's and it didn't slack when she opened her eyes. There was hatred in them and no recognition of her father. The man with the gun began to laugh and encourage the girl. Mr. Sanders tried to speak to the girl, pull her fingers away, and get her attention but to no avail. It was as if she was being controlled. Something had happened to her but what? Mr. Sanders fell dead across her bed but she kicked him to the floor. The man smiled with approval.

Author's Note

OOOOEEEOOOO! :) I hope you liked this sad story... It really broke me to write this. Do you think it should be a book or no? Opinions please!!

Reviews

[Allie]

Loved it!! Omg u should add more to it!!!!!

[Daytonight]

Ohhhhh! Wicked! Great write.

[halflives]

Indeed, very creepy. I'd certainly read it if you did.

[amdc101]

It should only be a book if you could write the rest as well as this. This was really well written and creepy...I loved it!

[TheElfPrincess]

Wow, that's a lovely daughter *cough cough NOT* Great story, very scary. Men controlling people, sounds like a great idea.

[Black]

yes you should..
a girl killing her own father.. so sad..