Maybe This Time

Maybe This Time

A Poem by Sbernie18
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Random song/poem

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Are we happy, is this a change,

It’s something different this time.

Always fighting, to prove you right,

And I won’t slow down this time.

Take the day to lose your mind,

See if it finds its way back again.

 

Something’s different, this is new,

The worlds always changing,

But I thought you knew.

I thought a lot, the most about you,

But don’t worry, I’m coming.

 

Don’t let go, please don’t let go,

Take my hand, I’ll pull you up,

And time will stop, so what’s the rush,

Please try to trust, that this will be different.

 

Maybe this time, you’ll change your mind,

Maybe this time, I’ll change mine.

No one can stop what will always happen,

We’ll never listen to what they say,

It’s easier this way, maybe it’s easier this way.

© 2011 Sbernie18


Author's Note

Sbernie18
ignore general punctuation

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This is an amazing piece. There is such power in your words; such meaning behind them. It makes me wonder what inspired you.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Nice theme selection and good write..

Posted 8 Years Ago


Relationships are always worth another try
Unless you are in danger
I love the carefree spirit of your poem
The desire for love

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

tyros are always welcomed:) but, you seem more than that:) great work

Posted 8 Years Ago


Yeah I'm terrible at punctuation. I tend to just write and disregard it for the most part.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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I like the poem a great deal. It has a good flow and a beat to it... but only if I stick in my own punctuation. That would be the only down side to this work. A little attention to punctuating it would bring it up that notch to make it terrific. Drop a line if you need a hand. Beyond a couple of points, brilliant work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Love this so much...going to feature it on Writers Unite!

Posted 8 Years Ago


'Take the day to lose your mind,
See if it finds its way back again.' - I love this... and I can definately relate.


Posted 8 Years Ago



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Sbernie18
Sbernie18

Syracuse, NY



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Hey, I'm from Syracuse. I write poetry, lyrics, a few short stories and longer stuff. I try to be as active as possible and review what I can. I love reading new poems and stories everyday so send me .. more..

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