It's Amazing

It's Amazing

A Poem by Sbernie18
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Trying something new

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It’s amazing.

How you said,

What you told me,

Was not a lie.

 

It’s funny.

All these people,

That never knew to,

Keep it from me

 

You try sometimes,

But could never be.

You tried to prove,

And we’d believe.

 

But hey,

I promise you,

I’ll try again.

I promise you.

 

I tried.

I apologize.

I just couldn’t stop,

Loving you.

© 2011 Sbernie18


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This is a very nice piece. I love the structure, as someone already said. But the way you laid it out is very powerful.

It’s funny.
All these people,
That never knew to,
Keep it from me

In this stanza, I feel like the to at the end of the third should be move to the beginning of the fourth. But thats just me, maybe.

Otherwise, great piece. I loved it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is a very nice piece. I love the structure, as someone already said. But the way you laid it out is very powerful.

It’s funny.
All these people,
That never knew to,
Keep it from me

In this stanza, I feel like the to at the end of the third should be move to the beginning of the fourth. But thats just me, maybe.

Otherwise, great piece. I loved it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Really nice poem and I liked the structure of it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


What is kept from us will always surface, eventually and sometimes we cannot help but still that person....this is poignantly haunting love...an emotional piece xx

Posted 8 Years Ago


I see. Well now that I understand that I think you did very good at this new thing of yours. Keep it up. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


The new was i guess the shortness of the lines and words, and such.

Posted 8 Years Ago


What was the new you are trying here? I rather enjoyed the message here. The emotion and the honesty. I have read a few poems on this topic today so I think it is safe to say a lot of people will get this on some sort of emotional level. Which some would argue is a driving factor in great poetry. Being able to evoke emotions out of people that may have been laying dormant.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Really like this poem. Nice write.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Sbernie18
Sbernie18

Syracuse, NY



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