Insane Patient

Insane Patient

A Poem by ChrisKeil

Lock me up in a all white room with my body tied

 

I got here because suicide is what I tried

 

stabbing myself twenty times felt so sweet

 

I rubed salt in the cuts to stimulate my physical treat

 

The police confiscated my knife I was happy to loan it

 

I wanted them to cut me since my hands are tied up at the moment

© 2010 ChrisKeil


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When I started to read this I am instantly picturing a really disturbed person lol....the imagery is a bit sickening...especially this line "I rubed salt in the cuts to stimulate my physical treat".

Yet, what a twist at the end...truly shows that seeing a mental person in action is not half as bad as seeing what is actually going on inside their head...good write!! keep it up ;)

Posted 10 Years Ago


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I enjoyed this, instead of crazy, I felt that the narrator has this overwhelming desire to feel. As if they had become so numb that even pain was barely a sensation anymore. They crave the pain like a drug and just like drugs you have to have more and more to make you feel normal. Uncluttered and straight to the point, this style fits the topic well.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Tis be a rather good write. ^_^

Posted 10 Years Ago


Oh geez! LOL

Posted 10 Years Ago


Bravo! Once again, you've done an excellent job. You truly have a knack for writing poetry, Chris. The imagery you attach to your words is am-a-zing. And I'm not just saying that. Good job. As always. This is definitely one of my favorites.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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This kind of has an eerie vibe to it... So magnificently grim and twisted. Bravo.

Posted 10 Years Ago


When I started to read this I am instantly picturing a really disturbed person lol....the imagery is a bit sickening...especially this line "I rubed salt in the cuts to stimulate my physical treat".

Yet, what a twist at the end...truly shows that seeing a mental person in action is not half as bad as seeing what is actually going on inside their head...good write!! keep it up ;)

Posted 10 Years Ago


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inner turmoil love it

Posted 10 Years Ago


Holy s**t. Pour whiskey on your wounds. That`s what I do.

|luvdrift|

Posted 10 Years Ago



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