If Someone Asked Me Why

If Someone Asked Me Why

A Poem by Samantha
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A poem on my unrequited love.

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If someone asked me why I love you, this is what I’d say:

I’d tell them of the time you spoke about your favourite Marvel comics,

And the way your face lit up when you described them to me.

I’d tell them how innocent and pure that radiance was, how childlike your mannerisms were,

In that moment at least.

And I’d hope they understand why I fell in love with the feeling of your untainted enthusiasm,

About some bloody comic books no one else cared about.


I’d show them all your worries and troubles,

Stacked on top of one another in a precariously balanced house made of playing cards.

And while they were assessing these I’d point out how selfless you are,

How your troubles were never centred around your own happiness.

And I’d hope they see that the house of cards I showed them is a reflection of the person you are,

The kind of person who’d knock those cards down if they had your name on them instead.


I’d paint them a picture of your mind as I see it,

Full of complex ambitions, conflicting emotions, unreasonable doubts and careless memories.

I’d use blue and pink to dot your journey here,

And blazing red to show them the great places you are destined to go.

And I’d hope they stand back and appreciate the amalgam of colors instead of questioning why,

There isn’t a single spot on the canvas I seem to fully understand despite being the artist.


I’d take them on a walk to the place we first met,

I’d make sure it was a sunny day first, just like that one.

I’d tell them I didn’t think much of you at all when I first met you,

And I’d make them sit in that same spot, and feel the same way we felt as indifferent strangers.

And I’d hope they understand that despite the seeming insignificance of that moment, 

I look back and am convinced I see a halo of light above that place, and the misleading simplicity of that day.


I’d tell them how tightly you hugged me when I was sad,

How softly you touched my arm when you beckoned to me that nothing was wrong.

How quietly you showed me an outpouring of inert friendship- friendship waiting to combust,

In a time I thought I needed you the most. 

And I’d hope they understand that it’s not just how wonderful it was breathing in the fragrance of your old jacket,

It was how wonderful it felt, feeling the weighty presence of a thousand words unspoken.


I’d give them the shoes and the bags and the hate I threw at your head,

Just for them to inspect amusingly and wonder why.

I always end up hating the people I love the most,

And I always end up scarring them with more of my sadness than I can remember the next morning.

And I’d hope they understand that it’s not the guilt that comes with the hangover,

It’s the gutsy sickness in your stomach that makes you heave the second your lips touch the glass of wine.


I’d warn them before they meet you, this is what I’d say:

“It’s easy to make that boy laugh, but it’s hard to win him over.

His love is not on display, his mind has been sent to the dry cleaners,

His laugh has been tampered with, by caution and logic.

But don’t ever say you don’t understand that he’s a wonderful human being”,

I’d hope they understand your facade is all pretence.


And if someone asked me why I love you, this is what I’d say:

It is hard for me to imagine,

Going through the rest of this life,

And meeting another singular human being like you.

This is what I would say,

If someone asked me why.

© 2013 Samantha


Author's Note

Samantha
This is the first poem I ever wrote, and my first post on this website. So far I've only posted my writing on my tumblr- coffeeshopsundays.tumblr.com (give it a read if you'd like! :) ) So, any comments or feedback is welcomed! Thanks for reading!

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For a first poem, this is powerful! It reads like Spoken Verse and I could denote the rise and fall of your voice as I read this aloud. Your imagery is wonderful. I really like "I look back and am convinced I see a halo of light above that place, and the misleading simplicity of that day." and these lines:

I’d give them the shoes and the bags and the hate I threw at your head,
Just for them to inspect amusingly and wonder why.
I always end up hating the people I love the most,

For a first, you have some amazing talent and I hope you will post more of your work here at WC. I am sending a read request to my friends and hopefully you will get some more feedback.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Samantha

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Lori. I really appreciate the feedback and kind words, and also thanks for sendin.. read more



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For being your first poem ever written it is beautifully done. I love how the poem is of admiration for another and it reminds me of a man in my own life that I love and admire very much. I purely enjoyed this poem. The poem definitely shows that you have a potential talent that could be phenomenal.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Brought me on a journey... a beautiful one. Well penned!

Posted 5 Years Ago


I love how descriptive this piece is...it's personal and relateable at the same time...you've captured the pain of unrequited love with poignant precision...well done :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Samantha

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much. :) So glad you could relate.
kublakhan27

5 Years Ago

My pleasure :)
WOW,
very nice, this is quite an exquisite piece of art. I relate strongly with this, life is what you make it and the winner is no one. We truly love often what we feel we can't have. I know that in my own life this is a beautiful telling of the longing and misery one can often find simply by looking at the one we love/loved. This is a beautiful write and is stunning in it's portrayal. Thank you for sharing this writing. Sincerely
Christopher
100/100

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Samantha

5 Years Ago

Wow, thanks so much Christopher! This is really nice of you. I tried to make unrequited love seem mo.. read more
This is very good I feel like you were very descriptive and were able to fulfill your purpose for the work Keep it up for a first poem it was very good

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Samantha

5 Years Ago

Thank you, Mike. This encouraged me to keep writing!
This is so great
well done and keep it up :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Samantha

5 Years Ago

Thanks a ton!!
stars are far

5 Years Ago

welcome :)
This is a amazing poem. I like the places you took me and the good description. Love is many things. Your description brought to life what love should be. No weakness in the outstanding poem of love.
Coyote

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Samantha

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much! I really appreciate the kind words.
this? this is your first? It is such a pleasure to find honest words like these . . . mature poetry that doesn't hide behind big words and faraway castles

your natural instincts are amazing, looking forward to reading more of you



Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Samantha

5 Years Ago

Wow, that's an amazing compliment... thanks so much Emily! I look forward to reading your work as we.. read more
I like the honesty in this piece, and hope to read more. Welcome to wc....Thanks for sharing

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Samantha

5 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and taking the time to review! I really appreciate it.
Wonderful narration and brilliant work done dearie :)
Loved it :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Samantha

5 Years Ago

Thank you. :)

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