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A Poem by Cadel
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Who let you in?

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A hum, A tone
rejoiced alone 
is glee 
from me to me.

A laugh, A cheer
When friends are here
is gold
thats doled
in excess.

But
A pang, A void,
A heart destroyed
is gloom,
a guest 
who knows you best
when empty is the room.




 

© 2018 Cadel


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I absolutely love how elusive yet full of significance this is.

The first stanza is for sure my favorite, because I love the flow and way the words sound.

I’m not going to lie, I was a bit disappointed when the rest of the poem didn’t follow the same intriguing pattern, but I see each stanza got longer which could have been intentional, so if that’s where your creative heart took you, don’t let my personal opinion stop you.

I am absolutely horrible with iambs and I’m definitly working on that skill, but if I’m not wrong you’ve used them throughout the entire poem quite well!

I really enjoyed reading this poem!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I love the rythm in reading this. Especially the first and the last verse are striking to me.
Even though it seemed unnatural to me at first how the length of the verses progress, I grew more and more fond of it reading it again and again.
This is a great poem, well done.

Posted 1 Year Ago


........I have no words.......my voice is in my awe!! Holy kwap this is awesome! Well done!

Posted 1 Year Ago


I like the way you utilize tempo in your writing - the patient rhythm and a) a) b) b) - c) d) d) c) rhyme scheme give me a sense of a ballad - haiku hybrid.

Nice work and am excited to see the way your style progresses.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

we need to be our own best company...if not...we will be very lonely...even in a crowded room.

i really like this poem...great personification...
j.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I am sure I recognize the message. One important thing, it encourages exploring, being open enough to get to know the environments. Really swell composition! Like it big! Centers on: a guest who knows you best. A real opener!
neurostar

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Damn...this was amazing. I felt a connection with the writing my current emotions.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very intriguing style with nice word selection
Thanks for sharing it

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Not really sure what you're trying to convey with this one but the flow and rhyme scheme do catch the readers' attention. Enjoyed it!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I absolutely love how elusive yet full of significance this is.

The first stanza is for sure my favorite, because I love the flow and way the words sound.

I’m not going to lie, I was a bit disappointed when the rest of the poem didn’t follow the same intriguing pattern, but I see each stanza got longer which could have been intentional, so if that’s where your creative heart took you, don’t let my personal opinion stop you.

I am absolutely horrible with iambs and I’m definitly working on that skill, but if I’m not wrong you’ve used them throughout the entire poem quite well!

I really enjoyed reading this poem!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Tags: joy, heartbreak, laugh, gloom, love, alone

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