Mirage...

A reflection of the emotions I have been feeling of late.

Dark consumed all thought

In deep chasms of my mind

Perplexed, I am left with

Fragmented moments of time

 

Dark shadows of doubt

Casted on my very soul

Fear weighs me down

As sickness takes a toll

 

Warped perception

In all this confusion

Am I just a figment?

A mere illusion?

 

An apparition reflected

In the gloomy nadir

Clung onto hope

In the pit of despair

 

Ghost like in figure

Dark and obscure

The stares of others

I often allure

 

Crystal droplets

Fall from my eyes

Washing away

My courage disguise

 

Choked, wordless

By the musty air

Clouded around

The pit of despair

 

Creaking branches

Of an old willow tree

Softly singing

So woefully

 

Vision opaque

Vapours luminous

From murky water

Rising of mist

 

Out of the fog

Tiny flicker of light

Draws strength enough

For the on-going fight

 

A mirage exists

Faint image I see

A glimmer of promise

Setting me free

Author's Note

After being so sick and getting bad news from the doctor I have been writing more, this is one of the writes written about my emotional state. I hope you like it. Reviews are always welcome and I hope you understand it :)

Reviews

[Bgbradley]

I'm so sorry that you are so sick! The poem left a lump in my chest
of empathy. I have never been that ill but I hope I would have your
strength and courage. I respect your written words and in turn I
respect you and your spirit. Your friend Bernadette

[DJ]

Thank you so much Bernadette for your kind words and the time you took to review my piece. Your words mean a lot to me. Cairo :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

So much energy and turmoil in this piece, and so much emotion! I love the way that you have used language and imagery to evoke a feeling and texture in this one. I also truly enjoyed the ending with the "glimmer of promise"...even in the darkness, a light usually emerges to guide us toward a smoother road. Well done!

[DJ]

Thank you Sarah, I'm glad you felt the emotion in this piece. Thank you for your kind review my friend. Yes, there is always light to guide us out of darkness we just have to be open to it :)

[zaneybear]

this is just beautiful, stay strong deary, I know we can't do much behind a keyboard but you have many people on this website that care about your recovery, and you witing abt is just breathtaking, it's amazing, stay strong you can make it through this :) and please everytime you write a new piece definitely send me a read request so I can read it please, I enjoy your work so much,

[DJ]

Thank you Zaney. The support from WC and the people here is actually significant despite it being from behind a key board, you all mean a lot to me and your words do help in keeping me strong. Thanks! Ill RR you if you RR me okay, I like reading your work too :)

[Douglas White]

You can feel the doubt, the confusion, the fear throughout the entire work, which is a good thing. It's one thing to read a poem of hurt, but to *feel* it - that's when the truth of the poem is really shining through. And this one certainly does. Your words do justice to your feelings.

And even through all that, the pain, the fear - it shows a hidden strength and a remarkable willingness to fight.

Some might see this poem as depressing, but I sure don't. I see a bared and honest soul.

[DJ]

Thank you Douglas, I am glad you were able to feel it. It comes from a raw and honest place, thank you for feeling that. As always a pleasure reading your kind reviews and I truly appreciate every word my friend.

[NA]

You always cause the heart to hurt a little when reading your emotional writes (not a bad thing) never give up xx

[DJ]

Thank you dear Raven, I like you profile pic btw. Thank you for your kind words and the time you take to read my work, I know how precious time is.

[Broken Wings]

This is sad and painful yet so powerful. I love the imagery you use, I had to look up the word nadir, to see what it meant too and I love that!
"An apparition reflected
In the gloomy nadir
Clung onto hope
In the pit of despair"
I love this stanza as it paints such a vivid image and it is so raw and full of emotion.

"A mirage exists
Faint image I see
A glimmer of promise
Setting me free"
And of course everyone loves seeing your strength and optimism hun, you write so beautifully, you are so strong, keep fighting and I wish you all the best :D

[DJ]

Haha Glad I made you think. Thank you so much Broken Wings, I appreciate the time you take to write and read. Hope your well my friend.

[bobc]

Very good...thanx...as much as you like, keep writing about this. Have to believe it helps to express the feelings like this...bobc

[DJ]

Thank you Bobc, it certainly does my friend.

[Tom]

Another touching and heartfelt poem Cairo, superbly written as ever from the soul which always creates the most intriguing and best poetry and you prove my point once again with this gem of poem !

Top write, a great inspirational read as always !

[DJ]

Thank you so much Tom, your reviews are always nice to read. I appreciate your time my friend.

[Katho28]

Your use of imagery is powerful... I'm happy that you ended on a positive note - "a glimmer of promise Setting me free"... I can sense that despite the darkness that exists, you have hope and strength :) This poem drew me into another world and as I read, the words seem to come alive... Well-penned :)

[DJ]

Thank you Kath, your words are always a comfort. Yes there is always hope, no matter how upset I am about things, I always manage to see the hope. Thank you my friend, again for the time taken to read and the review :)

[London's Lily]

Strength for the ongoing fight ~ that's what I want to see! Another gorgeous piece, Cairo, and I'm glad to see that glimmer of promise at the end. :) You've got this.

[DJ]

Thank you Lily, I'd like to think that I'm going to beat this beast too :p Thanks for the review, always a pleasure reading what you have to say, Cai.