Darkness Unmasks...

Darkness Unmasks...

A Poem by DJ
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Late night thoughts from an emotional mind.

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Blackness smothers

Darkness comes

I’m unravelling

Come undone

 

Street lights glisten

Moonlight licks

Cool night air

My mind ticks

 

Unable to sleep

But not yet awake

Bleak reality

I undertake

 

Blank eyes stare

Lonely night

Untamed mind

A writer’s plight

 

Tangled thoughts

Webbed brain

All these voices

I go insane

 

Lustrous stars

Small reprieve

Calm night air

Does not leave

 

I dwell within

Solace of night

Day time dawns

I’m out of sight

 

Lost in turmoil

Losing my mind

In the darkness

Peace I find

 

My hiding place

From the cold

And the dangerous

Outside world

 

In the night

No one hears

My insecurities

And my fears

 

I unmask

Truly be the me

That I hide

So cautiously

 

Fear of judgement

Fear of life

Fear of attracting

Pain and strife

 

Unable to live

But cannot leave

This is my

Reality

 

Not dead yet

But not living

Sickness being

Unforgiving

© 2013 DJ


Author's Note

DJ
I have been feeling sick so I wasn't going to write, I lay down in bed and then these thoughts came to mind. Night time muse, one of the many night time thoughts I have consuming me and keeping me awake. I hope you understand it and like it :)

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My hiding place
From the cold
And the dangerous
Outside world

In the night
No one hears
My insecurities
And my fears

Those parts struck a chord with me. Night time is feared by many, welcomed by some. It's bittersweet, being able to let go of facades, free to expose vulnerability... yet dreading those feelings at the same time. I'm glad you were able to get your thoughts out in spite of feeling sick, and I hope it was as therapeutic as you needed. :)


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DJ

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much Lily, yes you are right, I am one who finds comfort in the night. A night creature.. read more



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I loved this poem. Great use of rhymes and imagery. I have been suffering from insomnia for over 7 years now and I have encountered the darkness of depression many times so I am all too familiar with the Nighttime muse.

I love the way your words paint a clear picture of your raw emotions.

Great work
Keep it up.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is a very sad piece full of raw emotion! I love the rhyming theme through-out and it flows so effortlessly, you do have a great talent for rhyme, amongst your other talents of imagery and story telling. You are talented mate, keep fighting, you can kick that cancer straight in the head :) Great work here.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DJ

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much BW, your words mean a lot to me and I will keep fighting, always :)
This makes me sad. I've been in positions like this before, where really melds into imagination and I just don't know what's real or what's not. It was like that the day I was 7 months in, slipped on ice, and almost lost one of my children. I hope whatever troubles you will leave you alone.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DJ

8 Years Ago

I'm so sorry to hear about your pain, but so glad that you didn't lose your precious little one. I h.. read more
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Brilliance can come from pain, as this write proves. Really hope you start to feel better soon hun x

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DJ

8 Years Ago

Thank you my friend, I hope so too and your comments always bring comfort :)
Insomnia and depression. Good write. It's good you're exploring your darker side. I do prefer your humorous and hopeful side though but writing is a good way to purge and im glad you're able to channel your frustrations here. Your writing is amazing, and you seem to be able to get out of your comfort zone, and do it well.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DJ

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much Hana, I really appreciate your kind words and as always your comments are a joy to.. read more
I am all too familiar with the nighttime muse.

(Mine's a pain in the a*s - waking me up in the middle of the night from a sound sleep, but whatever works I guess).

I like the easy flow to this, it reads very naturally, without having to stop to ponder. The meanings are clear, yet not just thrown out there carelessly. This is more like a flow-of-consciousness sort of work, which makes it all the more interesting; So much more is revealed that way, than what we would normally allow ourselves to write. Definitely a good piece of work, Cairo.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DJ

8 Years Ago

Mine does that too! It's so annoying isn't it? Thank you so much Douglas, your words as always are a.. read more
You possess an envied craft for any aspiring writer ( indeed any writer ), the ability to open up your mind and thoughts to allow the reader to feel your raw emotion through the words you pen, a unique gift my friend !

Quality once more !

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DJ

8 Years Ago

Tom, you are awesome, I love reading your comments, thank you so much for your time once again my fr.. read more
I really feel the sense of "unraveling" in this one... In reading, I felt more as though I was experiencing a glimpse inside of your mind in those late night hours than actually reading a poem; I connected with this one.

Sickness being
Unforgiving -- these lines are haunting, and so powerful. Great way to close out the piece. Stay strong, my friend, as this too shall pass...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DJ

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much Sarah, your words are comforting and I truly appreciate your support and the time .. read more
My hiding place
From the cold
And the dangerous
Outside world

In the night
No one hears
My insecurities
And my fears

Those parts struck a chord with me. Night time is feared by many, welcomed by some. It's bittersweet, being able to let go of facades, free to expose vulnerability... yet dreading those feelings at the same time. I'm glad you were able to get your thoughts out in spite of feeling sick, and I hope it was as therapeutic as you needed. :)


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DJ

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much Lily, yes you are right, I am one who finds comfort in the night. A night creature.. read more
Well done here. Muses seem to like the night time...bobc

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DJ

8 Years Ago

That they do bobc :) Thank you for your time.

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