Should I wake before I die

Should I wake before I die

A Poem by Courtney
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Class assignment, started with a given line: If I should wake before I die..." we were allowed to "dress it up" this is a draft of my result.

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Should I wake before I die,

I shall count myself lucky

I shall count myself still waiting

For I know she holds,

Cupped in her soft hands,

my dried flower

Waiting for it to turn to dust

The dusk is here

We are both waiting

© 2009 Courtney


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Courtney
Just a draft of something for my creative writing class. Any and all comments and critiques welcom

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Awesome!
I love the poem in a whole but my favorite line was:
"The dusk is here."
It's so simple yet so ferocious.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Perhaps this poem speaks of deaths' permanence but implying value and beauty in the joy of being alive as converse thought instinctivly comes as a counterpoint. A reverse psychology poem could be construed. In an event, I enjoyed it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is actually quite sad it's like if you wake before you die you are left waiting to die. It however is well written and it flows effortlessly. Nicely done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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