The Storm

The Storm

A Poem by Calissa Knox

I feel the raindrops
falling on my face.
My soul is awakened
by the wind's embrace.
My heart beats like a drum
as thunder roars.
I run faster
and my spirit soars.

I fly high into the
illuminated sky
as two angry souls,
The Storm, and I,

collide.

© 2013 Calissa Knox


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Wow. This is amazing! I don't usually see works on this site that I like (including my own). But WOW!
Ok anyways; I do think you could change one very minor thing:
"I run faster
"and my spirit soars."
The "and" throws off the rhythm slightly (in my opinion). I would just add a comma after "faster" and then take out "and". But really, this is super minor so if you don't like changing your work, I understand. :)
Again, brilliant poem.
Keep writing!
~Patricia

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Calissa Knox

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for this helpful, encouraging review, Patricia. :) You keep writing, too!



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SKY
All rhythmic waves into a gentle meaning form....The Storm!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow. This is amazing! I don't usually see works on this site that I like (including my own). But WOW!
Ok anyways; I do think you could change one very minor thing:
"I run faster
"and my spirit soars."
The "and" throws off the rhythm slightly (in my opinion). I would just add a comma after "faster" and then take out "and". But really, this is super minor so if you don't like changing your work, I understand. :)
Again, brilliant poem.
Keep writing!
~Patricia

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Calissa Knox

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for this helpful, encouraging review, Patricia. :) You keep writing, too!
Another lovely poem. love how you and the storm are the same and are working together.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Calissa Knox

6 Years Ago

You understood. :) Thank you very much!
ayele marie dalmeida

6 Years Ago

Always :) enjoyed it .
Excellent poetry. love this. Trace

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Calissa Knox

6 Years Ago

Thank you!
This is a really nice poem. I love the flow and pace to this - it reads quite quick (if that makes sense?) I feel like the reader is just swept up in the piece from the first line to the last - it's great!

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Calissa Knox

6 Years Ago

Thank you very much, Lilly!
Very good. Your rhyming pattern is flawless, and this genuine piece stuns me. I'm a fan too! :D

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Calissa Knox

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much! :D
Miranda Olsen

6 Years Ago

No problem.
Very touching. I have felt this way before. Your poetry is like a song.
- Hobbit

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Calissa Knox

6 Years Ago

This actually goes with a song. Thank you very much! I'm glad you could relate.
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MAC
what a great visual piece...so many violent terms yet somehow it has the feel of empowerment to it. okay so one of my new favs.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Calissa Knox

6 Years Ago

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece.
MAC

6 Years Ago

you are welcome.
Quite an interesting piece. I like the imagery and the way you build up the emotion. The rhymes weren't bad either. The title drop was awesome and the singular word at the end was powerful.

I wonder though, who will emerge the victor? Storms are a primal force of nature and can be quite powerful. Is the human soul strong enough to conquer nature? Or is it even victory this particular soul seeks? Perhaps in raging against such a formidable opponent, it is really their own destruction that the narrator seeks.

This is a very thought provoking poem, with multiple avenues of perspective that can be taken on it.

Well done.

-Caradoc

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Caradoc

6 Years Ago

As I said, multiple avenues of perspective. The best art shows something, means something, different.. read more
Calissa Knox

6 Years Ago

Thank you very much.
Caradoc

6 Years Ago

You're very welcome.

Be well.
Awesome poem. It's almost as if I can feel the storm and it's giving me strength. I love the ending - So simple but so powerful. Thank you for sharing!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Calissa Knox

6 Years Ago

I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for the review!

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Calissa Knox
Calissa Knox

Seattle , WA



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