Brick Wall

Hadn't written a poem in a while so I thought it was a good time to do so!

Bashing against a brick wall,

Slamming it with all my might.

Nonetheless it still stands tall,

Nothing has come of my fight.

 

I keep waiting for it to fall,

Is what I'm doing right?

My body tires and begins to stall,

my head feels so light.

 

I continue to give it my all,

My heart begins to feel tight.

I'm starting to feel so small,

Ignorant to reality's plight.

 

Do you hear my call,

Do my words burn bright?

Am I stuck in this bloody brawl,

'til I lose my appetite?

 

Long ago, I do recall,

A time without such blight.

Long ago, I would enthral,

And capture my mind's delight.

 

I would soar like a fireball,

I was never prone to fright.

Now I practice protocol,

And pretend to feel alright.

 

How could such a downfall,

Befall one so forthright?

I'm in need of an overhaul,

My passion I will ignite.

 

Disparage meaningless spite!

No longer will I remain finite!

I'll be the pinnacle of foresight,

And bask in the warm daylight! 

 

Reviews

[Zoya]

A poem swimming in emotions! The rhymes are perfect. It maintains a great tempo and flows really well. The last stanza gave out some positive vibes. I loved it!

[Stan Lee]

Your poetry tastes like nandos. It kinda stings but I still want more! As usual you have delivered flawless rhyming and a great meter.
"Now I practice protocol,
And pretend to feel alright. "
Loved these two lines. Very easy for most of us to relate to I'm sure! Thanks for sharing your poetry Captain. Stay inspired. :)

[Stacy Purvis]

Such intense emotion! I see the fighter within you, shining aura and might, too. What an amazing piece you've shared.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I was trying to understand what this poem was about the whole time while reading it but I'm still clueless.
I can feel the frustration in this piece though, the feeling of just wanting to give up.
But the end seemed more uplifting and a bit more full of hope.
The rhyme scheme was great.
I enjoyed none the less, keep on writing :)